10 seconds

[C.A.P 23]

something i wrote a long time ago,not really spend a lot of time on it..sorry for any spelling mistakes btw..

he was a quiet little man,never been real
real with his peers,never made them feel
he never showed himself for what he was
never wanted 2 much attention,never made any fuss
cuz when you see your confidence beeing stripped away from you like a 1 dollar bill
for those 10 seconds or less you're ready for the kill
you see for those 10 seconds or less
you can murder, you can dispose of,you can create a mess
you see for ten seconds nothing holds you back
when you got nothing to lose,when the wall's on your back
when you've reached the limit of your patience
just like all those unreported occasions
you see for 10 seconds you're free and unbound
its when you make your adverseries know they'll be hunt down
the clock is ticking,it,s on
the reason why you begun wrting this song
you see for 10 seconds,the world is yours
hit them fuckers,destroy their cores
they dont know what it's like,they aint gotta clue
how it feels to get hurt,how it feels to be you
you see for ten seconds you own them all
it's at that time when you gotta make em fall
at those 10 seconds you gotta stand tall
for those 10 seconds you gotta be raw
cos thats what they undertand,a piece of their own venom
get em all,to hell,send em!
for those 10 seconds or less,you gotta be ruthless and hard
they got knocked out,they got dealt the wrong card
for those 10 seconds,picture your self victorious
stand on top of em,reigning glorious
for those 10 seconds,depict their pain
they're found dead,they're found slain
it's just you,going against the grain
throw away your black glasses,dismiss your cane
your blind no more,for once you see
for once your the number: o-n-e
for those 10 seconds,explode
show em how it gets done,in K-Y mode
when you want it done ,it gets done
you may want em all,you may want none
for those 10 seconds,you gotta outperform
be something exotic,dont be the norm
kill em all,your enemies sworn
they got friends,you gotta make em mourn
you got 10 seconds,make it reality
before you drive your self into insanity..

 

[2pac4prez2004]

it was good man, i was feeling it. up untill the point u were reigning victorious after that the next few bars kinda fell of the tracks there...

these:

"your blind no more,for once you see
for once your the number: o-n-e
for those 10 seconds,explode
show em how it gets done,in K-Y mode
when you want it done ,it gets done
you may want em all,you may want none
for those 10 seconds,you gotta outperform
be something exotic,dont be the norm"

maybe its just me but i didnt feel them few bars, the rest i enjoyed

i see ur keeping the dark stance now :thumb:
erm also, maybe work on the line 'when the wall's on your back"
i know u can make a sweeter line than that :thumb:

good work Kon.

 

[C.A.P 23]

thnx for the feedback man..i appreciate it..

this was written a long,long time ago..

ill try and improve on the things u said..maybe even extract them and make it shorter with a different ending,i dont know..