7 minutes

[shattered dreams]

Just 7 minutes of suffocation
will end this obsessed fatuation
7 minutes is all it takes
to see exactly what’s real and fake
7 minutes for a stop to my cancer
cancer from leading a life with questions unanswered
7 minutes to bring this journey to an end
and see exactly where souls descend
7 minutes in trade for 17 years
of screams, shouts and tears
7 minutes of hating everything you have
sold to an eternity of wishing to get it back
7 minutes fall prey to one
heart failed, corruption begun
7 minutes of revenge
just to smell the devils scent
7 minutes of hating being alive
from all the times you fought and tried
7 minutes of water saturation
without a moment hesitation
7 minutes of head in water
because you’ve felt no “heavenly father”
god has a plan for everything?
suicide is the plan for me

 

[~live2tell~]

Just 7 minutes of suffocation
will end this obsessed fatuation
7 minutes is all it takes
to see exactly what’s real and fake
7 minutes for a stop to my cancer
cancer from leading a life with questions unanswered
7 minutes to bring this journey to an end
and see exactly where souls descend
7 minutes in trade for 17 years
of screams, shouts and tears
7 minutes of hating everything you have
sold to an eternity of wishing to get it back
7 minutes fall prey to one
heart failed, corruption begun
7 minutes of revenge
just to smell the devils scent
7 minutes of hating being alive
from all the times you fought and tried
7 minutes of water saturation
without a moment hesitation
7 minutes of head in water
because you’ve felt no “heavenly father”
god has a plan for everything?
suicide is the plan for me

I always enjoy reading your poetry, its all very different. This I don't think I totally understood, but I did derive my own meaning from it. Thought this piece to be very well written and thought provoking.

 

[Florida123]

that blew me away...it's amazing how some people (like yourself) can use language and words so effectively to describe what sometimes feels undescribeable but yet do so in a unique way... :thumb: :thumb:

 

[shattered dreams]

ty and the seven minutes came from if you have your head underwater for 7 minutes your gone. so maybe that helps

 

[jm5471]

i liked this alot, i liked how u worked in the 7 minutes to break up the bars and also the words that u used to describe the way ur feeling, its tight keep it up, i also enjoy reading ur writings, the concepts and different forms are interesting

 

[Belo]

That was cool.. was it drowning yourself in the water? not sure if i got it right
Nice writing and word use tho my man
Peace
Belo

 

[shattered dreams]

yeah belo it was. lol and you know im female right?

 

[-Daniel-]

The first word that hit me while reading this was 'Strong'. In fact that came in the first couple of sentences and carried on through it's the works entirity.

 

[MaKa\/eLiThaD0N]

deep.... odd but deep IMO

 

[SeX KiTTeN]

I absolutely loved the way you said "just to smell the devil's scent"...sent chills up my spine!

I probably would have written the line as "of screams, shouts and too many tears"....but the way in which you have written it really shakes things up a bit!

:thumb: :thumb: :thumb:

 

[Buck_Buck_Bing]

boring, try again