A Moment In Time

#1
Ok, this is sort of based on the movie "West Side Story". For those unfamiliar with it there is a part where Tony and Maria first see each other and its like the world stops for a brief moment in time as they hold each others gaze.
Well I kinda imagined myself walking down a crowded street when my maria happens to walk past, and as we lock eyes for a second or two, we see the rest of our lives together in love in that glance. And then ofcourse the world starts spinning again and we never even meet before she's gone. Yeh its corny, but its what came out so here it is anyway...short and simple.


A Moment In Time

That look in your eyes conveys so much,
Almost reaching out to touch.

Time kindly pauses for us there,
The wind blows gently through your hair.

Passers by become a blur,
Emotions inside begin to stir.

Then cruelly time speeds me away from you,
And people walking block my view.

In a trance the moment passed,
Please tell me how to make this last.

The love we shared is lost too soon,
The nights we gazed up at the moon.

All this and more in a single glance,
That day we passed on the street by chance.









peace.
 

k69atie

SicC's Love
#2
This was a beautiful poem, i really enjoyed reading it. Your emotion really came through!

Great writing. Keep it up :)
 

Missy "C"

Active Member
#3
nice poem, very enjoyable, it makes you imagine what's going on his mind in that magic moment... keep posting your work, this is one so beautiful! :thumb:
 
#4
Levendi said:
A Moment In Time

That look in your eyes conveys so much,
Almost reaching out to touch.

Time kindly pauses for us there,
The wind blows gently through your hair.

Passers by become a blur,
Emotions inside begin to stir.

Then cruelly time speeds me away from you,
And people walking block my view.

In a trance the moment passed,
Please tell me how to make this last.

The love we shared is lost too soon,
The nights we gazed up at the moon.

All this and more in a single glance,
That day we passed on the street by chance.

I know that movie! Was really feeling this. You portrayed your emotions well and kept it simple, which I like. Good structure and flow too. I like this in its entirety.
 
#5
Being one who isn't familiar with the mentioned film, to read this the picture came across crystal clear.

All this and more in a single glance,
That day we passed on the street by chance. -
I love this verse, you couldn't have done a better one to put up a quality finish. All in all, Sweet.
 

Ivory$horty

†PoeticPrincess†
#7
Bravo Levendi...this was a quality piece from a quality poet. I really loved this. It was definately short and sweet...

All this and more in a single glance,
That day we passed on the street by chance


^^ Brilliant finish!
There's not much else to say but...well done.
Keep it up reh!

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~
 

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