Another Untitled drop from MATW95

[MATW95]

Responded to The_Destroyer, GhettoStar, artisticgurl

Wrote this before summer started, but just found it and thought I'd share:

Now I realize that true love hasn’t found me
But this pain is still lurking and sorrow still surrounds me
Always told myself I’d never cry for a woman
Didn’t understand the point, it was beyond my understanding
But when it happened to me, I felt like nobody understood
She says there’s a chance but sometimes I feel like it’s for good
Hold out my arms whenever I see her from now on
Wanting to make that connection; that previously shared bond
But I see in her eyes, sometimes she don’t wanna see me
Like “Just leave me alone, your decision hurt me deeply”
And it pains me, yes it really hurts
When I think of all the ways that her and I could’ve worked
It’s times like these I wanna go back to trees
And just escape for a bit and make the emotions just leave
Sometimes I find myself digging in my pocket for help
Looking for that pipe because that’s how I dealt

 

[SiGh]

I liked it, it told a story alot can relate to.
Keep writing mayn. :thumb:

 

[ArtsyGirl]

I really liked that, no no loved. I loved the flow and structure.. I'll quote some of my fav bits:

Now I realize that true love hasn’t found me
But this pain is still lurking and sorrow still surrounds me
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And it pains me, yes it really hurts
When I think of all the ways that her and I could’ve worked
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Sometimes I find myself digging in my pocket for help
Looking for that pipe because that’s how I dealt

Looking at those, it seems your poem was balanced really well start, middle and end. Well done :thumb:

 

[Kadafi Son]

Agree with sIGH. I feel you on most points in your detail. You almost lost me at the end with ya pipe, but I understand where u came from with that. Love can have some fucked up consequences. Not to say you should give up...

My bad 4 takin so long to respond. Damn. Over 2 months only 2 reviews. Makes me think we waistin' our time showin' our shit