cupid

#1
hey all ,, well this is my third poem i post in this forum,,,,hope everyone likes it

I was once known as a man who never pleads
Didn't think one day I would be this lonely indeed
For I am in need of someone to share my hardship
Someone to give me all the love I need
You see right now I carry a dead heart
I want someone to be on top of my customized chart
But where can I find this special someone
When will I be able to call u baby and hon
Right now all I want is for cupid to start doing his job
Like a thief I'm wondering whose heart will I rob
But still I can't find the right one
Everyone I meet wants me to treat them like Minnie the moocher
Can't believe I went through hell and high water for this
Cupid should wear glasses because he always misses
Will the day come when I finally meet my undreamt dream
Will the day come when I can just look up and smile
Will the day come when I would stop shaking
Will the day come when I would say "sorry miss but I'm taken"
Cupid can't you see me evacuating my two holes
Can't you see those straight line cuts in my arm
Or is it amusing u me doing myself some harm
Dear cupid you’re a hypocrite why did you lie to me
Promised all your customers equality
You're just a legend filled with hypocrisy
Fixed me up with someone who didn't care for me
I'm giving you another chance show me what you got
If you're going to leave me hanging
I just hope you drop dead and rot
Cupid help me out I'm barely standing
Who will be the one to let my spirit fly
I am still looking up at the cloudy sky
Until I saw her face
Filled with love and grace
My heart started to beat like a knocking door
Blood started to run like a wavy shore
She is the one she is the one I started screaming
I decided to write her a poem that you are reading
I love u do u share my feelings
Let me be happy and answer me yeah I do
Now let me sit and wait for your answer
Let me picture us together for awhile
As I look behind the shadows
I can see cupid giving me a "you owe me" smile
 
#2
Dear cupid you’re a hypocrite why did you lie to me
Promised all your customers equality

thats my favorite line in this, keep up the writing i liked this poem
 
#4
assassin_4001 said:
hey all ,, well this is my third poem i post in this forum,,,,hope everyone likes it

I was once known as a man who never pleads
Didn't think one day I would be this lonely indeed
For I am in need of someone to share my hardship
Someone to give me all the love I need
You see right now I carry a dead heart
I want someone to be on top of my customized chart
But where can I find this special someone
When will I be able to call u baby and hon
Right now all I want is for cupid to start doing his job
Like a thief I'm wondering whose heart will I rob
But still I can't find the right one
Everyone I meet wants me to treat them like Minnie the moocher
Can't believe I went through hell and high water for this
Cupid should wear glasses because he always misses
Will the day come when I finally meet my undreamt dream
Will the day come when I can just look up and smile
Will the day come when I would stop shaking
Will the day come when I would say "sorry miss but I'm taken"
Cupid can't you see me evacuating my two holes
Can't you see those straight line cuts in my arm
Or is it amusing u me doing myself some harm
Dear cupid you’re a hypocrite why did you lie to me
Promised all your customers equality
You're just a legend filled with hypocrisy
Fixed me up with someone who didn't care for me
I'm giving you another chance show me what you got
If you're going to leave me hanging
I just hope you drop dead and rot
Cupid help me out I'm barely standing
Who will be the one to let my spirit fly
I am still looking up at the cloudy sky
Until I saw her face
Filled with love and grace
My heart started to beat like a knocking door
Blood started to run like a wavy shore
She is the one she is the one I started screaming
I decided to write her a poem that you are reading
I love u do u share my feelings
Let me be happy and answer me yeah I do
Now let me sit and wait for your answer
Let me picture us together for awhile
As I look behind the shadows
I can see cupid giving me a "you owe me" smile

Its really different message wise and I like that alot, its refreshing (I seem to be using that word alot just lately).

I think it could use more work structurally just to make it flow better, content wise I really enjoyed the read.

Good drop :thumb:
 

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