Don't.

[MX Red]

Don’t call me name, I don’t want to come,
Don’t depend on me for love, ill run,
Don’t cry, for a tear has never left my eye,
The lows reached lower than the highs,
Why do u hate that its so easy for me to get by,
You close your eyes and you say u see me,
When I close my eyes I feel free,
Finally released,
Our souls are unbound – finally at peace,
Empty promises of trust, misconceptions of love,
Brief emotions of longing and lust,
It could never be enough,
You were everything I wanted,
But never anything I needed,
Let what’s been be,
And try and see that you and me;
We were never a ‘we’,
Only two people trying to be happy.

peace
MX!

 

[~live2tell~]

Were you angry when you wrote this? I can't decide if it has a trace of bitterness in it... or whether this is just simple closure?

Anyway whatever I loved it, your expressions were strong throughout and even though its only a short poem it was strong and powerful. I love the way you ended it, so blunt yet honest.

Great drop, keep writing.

 

[Jurhum]

this one reminds me of somethings that's goin on right now. Anyway, it was very good. I enjoyed it. I think it's good to write poems such as this one cuz we been seeing a lot of love poems. We saw a lot of acceptance poems. We need more rejection poems.

 

[MX Red]

Na im not angry at all, or bitter - its hard for her, she is taken it all to personally. She is to nice for her own good - she is built a lot different to me, she needs security all the time... i need my freedom or at least i like my freedom. This aint closure either - the chances of shaking this girl anytime soon (as in her not constantly being around me) is very slim if the last few weeks are anything to go by! Maybe i should show her this...lol...really hit the message home!

Thanks both for the positve feedback - much appreciated!
peace
MX!

 

[imported_MAKaveli_10]

dont really get poems but that wasn't bad.

 

[kman_69]

cool peice....flow was a bit off at the start

When I close my eyes I feel free,
Finally released,
Our souls are unbound – finally at peace,


but im feelin those lines!^^

keep i tup!

 

[shattered dreams]

i really liked this poem...i felt you on a little different levels...nice word choice also..i like the fact the rhyme scheme changes but is constant at the same time. nicely written.. favorite lines were
Let what’s been be,
And try and see that you and me;
We were never a ‘we’,
Only two people trying to be happy.

 

[Seren]

Hey brawd
ok well i havent been on this board for a while so reading this was kind of a shock cos i think we speak about every 2 weeks.... so yea not really sure wat its about but remember im here for you gorgeous....

the poem itself:
i really liked it, loved the way ur emotions came out favourite lines
Brief emotions of longing and lust,
It could never be enough,
You were everything I wanted,
But never anything I needed,

love you lots babe, how about the grand slam win? proud or what
cariad
ur chwaer
S

 

[MX Red]

Chwaer......CYMRU AM BYTH!

What a match...loved it! (still recovering). Proud doesnt cover it!

yeah dont worry bout the poem, the whole point is that its nothing...just wish she would understand that!

Sorry didnt reply to the text or answer the phone....was in work and phone was in house!
Speak soon
Love Al xX

 

[Cown]

Really liked this poem, I know a friend that once had exactly the same problem. The girl just couldn't get it through her thick head that they where over, then luckily she found someone else and finally left my homie alone lol.

Again, nice subject and nice portrayal :thumb:

 

[radkin]

I really liked this, it describes how I felt alot of times when I've been in a relationship,

 

[jm5471]

Empty promises of trust, misconceptions of love,
Brief emotions of longing and lust,
It could never be enough,
You were everything I wanted,
But never anything I needed,



this was my favorite line ,it was deep n real

 

[Robbo1984]

Yeh, I like this one alot man! Alot of people on here have talent for writing

 

[Ivory$horty]

I've missed your writing, It was great to see you post this up. Short but straight to the point.

You were everything I wanted,
But never anything I needed,
Let what’s been be,
And try and see that you and me;
We were never a ‘we’

^^ Really loved the way that sounded once read aloud. As always, we can expect nothing but dope writing from you.
Keep it up.

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[Blunted Dreamz]

I had a woman that was exactly like that chase me around a few years ago. When I told her straight up that it was over (actually it never started) she decided I was joking with her. Damn if I didn't have to go fishing in Alaska to finally get rid of her. She refused to believe that I didn't need or want her around me 24/7... Anyways, enjoyed the drop without a doubt, hope you don't have to move to another state to solve your dilemma...