Fears

[MaKa\/eLiThaD0N]

"Fears"
nothing shall pump none hear
even though i hear demons
screamin in my mind im sure
it will get to me in time
so i live life by my time
aint gonna go about it like i got no spine
instead try and be the bright star an shine
in the night sky i will live my life with no fears shed no tears
untill the day that i die

 

[~live2tell~]

Another short poem from you... I didn't understand the first line though. I liked this part "instead try and be the bright star an shine"

 

[xXHizzo.M40Xx]

nice small poem, although i didnt understand the first line either... still pretty good tho..

 

[kman_69]

short....and different...i like short peices..

the flow on this seemed a lil off point tho..

anwyays, keep it up

peace.

 

[Blunted Dreamz]

I enjoyed it, and I think I get the first line if I put a pause in there. Like the shortness as well.

 

[shattered dreams]

felt this one.. quick and easy read....
my favorite part was
i will live my life with no fears shed no tears
untill the day that i die
felt that part a lot....

 

[Belo]

felt this one.. quick and easy read....
my favorite part was
i will live my life with no fears shed no tears
untill the day that i die
felt that part a lot....

I liked those lines the most too.. and also didn't quite get wat the 1st line was meant to mean
I did like how it was short and to the point
Keep it up
Peace