Imagination

[jm5471]

i havent posted in a month or 2 so heres something, if youve seen the movie finding neverland thats where i got the inspirtation to write this

imagination can leave some in such speculation
cause expectation will leave some in need of resistation
so believe n youll recive all but desperation
it will leave you unable to concieve
call you can achieve with imagination
some are decieved by the shades pulled over their eyes
so there deprived almost a slave of their cold eyes
so bold is the pride of the stage writer
cause they pray at night there play will become higher
not the prey of the fighter who ignites the fire
who leads them astray and unable to write more
with nomore to say
cause their creative ability can be stopped with hostility
and props no more have any feeling to thee
its as if rocdks were thrown at the stage during performance
only insurance can save all they've slaved for the stage is left dormant
i guess imagination is in the eyes of the beholder
thats what i just realized
for so long i was deprived
but now im older
i guess i looked over the wrong side of my shoulder


tell me what yall think about it

 

[kman_69]

flow is right on point as usual man...

however my only critism would be that at times this peice comes off a little cryptic....

other than that, its dope...

keep it up!

 

[jm5471]

thanks for checkin it out

 

[fwn]

i guess imagination is in the eyes of the beholder
thats what i just realized
for so long i was deprived
but now im older
i guess i looked over the wrong side of my shoulder

Love that ending, just love it. straight on the point:thumb:


though i dont get what it is u refer to in this line. I know peoms should be understood thru every1'z own perspective, but i just cant get a hold of this

some are decieved by the shades pulled over their eyes
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[assassin_4001]

i like the poem, i especially liked the beggining

imagination can leave some in such speculation
cause expectation will leave some in need of resistation
so believe n youll recive all but desperation

nice ryhmes u got there,and the flow was ok,,,keep it up man

 

[jm5471]

thanks and what i meant was that sometimes people put a block up on people and dont want to see what is really there until its revieled then the shades are pulled over their eyes

 

[Jocka]

I'm really liking the rhymes. As i read, it gave me the feeling that only Def Poetry gives me. Ya know that feeling? lol. It was very well written with a great ending.. i loved the end. great stuff

 

[jm5471]

thanks for the comments and im happy you enjoyed it, its been a while since i posted something that i put some time into

 

[~live2tell~]

I really liked the words you used, how you put them all together to make it flow like that was really good - I haven't seeen the movie so I couldn't relate it with that, but it still kept my attention till the end - nice drop