Lance( long read)

#1
okay let me give you a quick rundown...the dirt lot is one of me and my mans spot...the "words are erased" words he wrote in the dirt one time...and i talk about saving myself thats kind of obvious but i saved everything including my kiss for him..first kiss was right after i got off the plane...and purity is the name of a kid that we want to have..lance is obviously the man i love..


I miss you and your mentality
I miss you and all that you bring
I miss you and the sound of your words
I miss your singing.. okay wait now that’s just absurd
I miss being down
And you turning it around
I need to hear the sound of your voice
Once the phone rings my heart will rejoice
Looking at a picture of us in the dirt lot
The words are erased but memories will never be forgot

All that you have to do
Is believe in it being true
trust the fact id do anyting for you

Baby right now you got me feeling so blue
From the fact of me missing and needing you
never felt our love has ever been more true
Lance the rest of my life im dedicating to you

What did I do in my past life
To get someone like you accepting me as your wife
Somehow you stole my heart with your ways
Even though we fight every single day
Lance never forget the words that ive said
I meant those words as seriously as death
I feel for you like no other
Its like a new feeling has been discovered
Ive waited for someone for so long
That I could count on to be there all along
And now its finally gone

All that you have to do
Is believe in it being true
trust the fact id do anything for you

Baby right now you got me feeling so blue
From the fact of me missing and needing you
never felt our love has ever been more true
Lance the rest of my life im dedicating to you

Ive saved myself in ever possible aspect
Which is something that before you, I felt regret
Because I thought the right guy was never going to come
Then I met you and I knew waiting was the best thing ive done
At the airport was the first time I gave myself to you in both mind and body
Five seconds before kissing you I knew all that composes me
doesn’t just belong to anybody
But gods perfect creation
Out of this whole nation
No let me correct that out of this whole world
I don’t know how I was the one chosen to be your only girl

All that you have to do
Is believe in it being true
trust the fact id do anyting for you

Baby right now you got me feeling so blue
From the fact of me missing and needing you
never felt our love has ever been more true
Lance the rest of my life im dedicating to you

God lance you are so perfect
Your love, I don’t deserve it
You can do so much better than me
Why is it with me you want purity?
So much I have put you through
And yet you stay loyal and true
See why I think I don’t deserve you
Why is it to me you remain loyal?
When you are on the same step as a royal
But please im begging you let me be the one you create a family
And stay loving only our kids, family and me
Never leave us
Never abuse my trust
For having you in my life is a must
don’t let our love escalate to a bust

All that you have to do
Is believe in it being true
trust the fact id do anyting for you

Baby right now you got me feeling so blue
From the fact of me missing and needing you
never felt our love has ever been more true
Lance the rest of my life im dedicating to you
 
#2
This was nice and obviously very personal and it must hold alot of meaning for you.

I thought the repetitive parts were good but too repetitive, the verses were good but you put them in too often IMO.

The first verse was brilliantly written, it seemed to be a little forced towards the end.

Still I enjoyed reading :thumb:
 

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