Life Aint Fun

[Ridin 4 Pac]

Ever since you left me
Life aint been no fun
Even when I’m out with friends
Im still thinking about my #1
I feel as if I could break
At any given moment
Im goin crazy
And I’ll bet my life on it
Life aint fun 4 me no more and I don’t know what else to say
Im not saying im going away
But it hurts that you don’t want me to stay
I never thought id be rejected by the one I love so much
It feels like a mother rejecting her only child with a cold-uncaring touch...
Life for me aint fun no more
I don’t know what else to do
I miss the good old days
When I could call you boo
Now that you’ve finally left me
The one I once adored
I’ve come to the conclusion that
Life aint fun no more.

 

[Sebastian]

i like this poem, i think u expressed your feelings quite well
only thing i dont like is the flow

 

[~live2tell~]

I liked this too, your rhyming was good the flow was a lil off but I found it read better when I was reading more slowly. You expressed your feelings well throughout, good job :thumb:

 

[xXHizzo.M40Xx]

nice rhymin skills... like the way you have described your feelings... "It feels like a mother rejecting her only child with a cold-uncaring touch..." pretty good!... keep it up

 

[shattered dreams]

i felt this poem a lot...me and my man went through it today and yesterday...we are back together thank god..know where your coming from..nicely written also like your word choice...take care

 

[kman_69]

feelin this one..

i def know where ur commin from with it...

keep em commin.

peace.

 

[Belo]

Aww I really enjoyed this poem... especially repeating Life Aint Fun..
that was great
These lines were my fav:
"I never thought id be rejected by the one I love so much
It feels like a mother rejecting her only child with a cold-uncaring touch..."
^^^^ tight work
As I said already... nice ass poem man
Felt it a lot
Keep up the good work
Peace

 

[Jocka]

I didnt like the beginning as much as i liked the end.. it started off without a rhythm to me but developed one somewhere in the middle. Overall though it was good!