life

[fisherM.A.N.]

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heres one i wrote couple weeks ago..

life

n. pl. lives (livz)

1. The interval of time between birth and death.

I search for meaning, for something worth believing,
and wonder if this existence was even worth conceiving.
From birth to grieving a person's turn to dirt and leaving,
time for a person on the surface of this Earth is fleeting.
Is the search worth completing, or am I receiving a lie?
Am I only dreaming that I might find the meaning of life?

2. The characteristic state or condition of a living organism.

Each breath is stress as this quest I second guess,
for my steps from the present tense to death are less.
The extent of stress tends to cause neglect of rest.
As I inspect this pest, I suspect I'm perplexed at best,
lost at worst, meaning a lot of hurt my brain sustains.
Insane I wane as I strain in vain and my pain remains.

3. Human existence, relationships, or activity in general.

Currently, I contemplate this existence with urgency.
Uncertainty worries me: what could my purpose be?
Life I observe to be nothing more than a curse to me.
Suddenly, a stir in me occurs to cure my insecurity.
It is the words of He who is the author of life eternally:
"Assuredly, you'll discover meaning if you turn to Me."

~1~

 

[~live2tell~]

I love how you have incorporated the meanings of life into each verse, very well thought out and cleverly written.

I like your rhyme scheme and content wise its sound.

Each verse was better than the previous and that kept me intrigued whilst reading till the end.

Good job :thumb:

 

[The_Destroyer]

This is good. Nice rhymes, good length, smooth flow, and interesting message.

Keep droppin'

 

[kman_69]

Uncertainty worries me: what could my purpose be?
Life I observe to be nothing more than a curse to me.

^^that was a cool line...nice flow through the whole peice (tho some rhymes seemed a little forced)

great format tho!...i loved it!

....keep em commin!
peace

 

[xXHizzo.M40Xx]

Agree with kman 69... great format, breakin it down into three parts, each part more engrossing then the previous...