lyrics youth of today

[amor77]

YOUTH OF TODAY

TO THE YOUTH OF TODAY GOTTA WATCH HOW U PLAY
REMEMBER WATCH YER BACK EVERY FUCKIN DAY.
S.T.DS EVERYWHERE MUGGERS N ABUSERS
WHERE DA FUCKS DA COPS IN THEIR POLICE CRUISERS.
WHEN KIDS GETTIN SHOT OR STABBED DRIVEBYS THE LOT
MUTHAFUCKIN BAD GUYS NEVER GET CAUGHT.
STREETS AINT SAFE NO MORE
ANOTHER DEAD BODY ON THE FLOOR
MURDA EVERYWHERE IT AINT FAIR
SHOW LOVE BEWARE TAKE CARE.
(CHORUS)
YOUTH OF TODAY WATCH HOW U PLAY
GOTTA WATCH YER BACK EVERY FUCKIN DAY.
TOO MUCH DODGY BULLSHIT GOING ON
PLAY SAFE AND WEAR A FUCKIN CONDOM.
DONT HAVE WEANS FUR THE SAKE OF IT
TOO MANY FUCKED UP PARENTS WHO DONT GIVE A SHIT.

GOVERNMENT TOO WRAPPED UP IN OTHER PEOPLES WARS
SHOULD HAV LOOKED AFTER THEIR OWN COUNTRY STUPID FUCKS.
OUR YOUNG SOLDIERS ARE GETTIN KILLED EVERYDAY
WI SUICIDE BOMBERS IN BIG FUCKIN TRUCKS.
LET THE YOUTH OF TODAY COME HOME FRAE AFGHAN N IRAQ
LET THEM ENJOY THEIR FAMILY LIFE BRING THEM BACK.
(CHORUS)
WHEN A WOZ A LAD ABOOT TEN OR ELEVEN
WASNT AS BAD SO GLAD A DIDNT STAY IN GOVAN.
AM FROM THE GLASGOW END WHITE AND THE GREEN
GOVAN WIZ THA BLUE SIDE UGLIEST UV EVER SEEN.
KIDDEN ON MUCH LUV RESPECT MY RIVAL FITBA CLUB
WALK ON THA BHOYS N GREEN N WHITE C UZ INDA PUB.
WONDERING WOT AM TALKIN ABOUT ITS THE DIFFERENCE TODAY
THE RIVALRY WAS ABOOT THE WORST SHIT TO WATCH FOR WHEN U WENT OUT TO PLAY.
(CHORUS)

SO LISTEN OUT YALL YOUNGSTERS IN THA YEAR 2007
TOO MANY FUCKED UP SHIT GOING DOWN DONT WANT YALL IN HEAVEN.
STAY YOUNG FOR A WHILE A HEARD TOO MUCH DODGY SHIT
ITS GETTIN WORSER EVERYDAY WOT DA FUCK WHIT WHIT.
10 N 11 YEAR OLDS WI BLADES N GANG FIGHTS
12 N 13 YEAR OLDS WI GUNS ROBBIN DUDES WI THEIR MAWS TIGHTS.
WHEN I WIZ THAT AGE I WIZ IN THA HOOSE WI MA ACTION MEN
GIRLS IN THA HOOSE WI THEIR BARBIES N KEN.
MUCH LUV TO YALL YOUNGSTERS WATCH HOW U PLAY
SHOW LUV STAY ALIVE THE YOUTH OF TODAY.
(CHORUS)

stephen armour
2/11/77
todays date
13/9/07

 

[Pain Of Depth]

stop using the SHIFT LOCK button, it's quite annoying to read

It's a good attempt, but here's some things I think you might want to improve..

First thing I noticed was that your flow is really off!
One line being way longer than the next, and it's hard to rap it (the way I tried to)

Another thing, rap songs are usually made up out of

intro
16 lines - verse 1
8 lines - chorus
16 lines - verse 2
8 lines - chorus
16 lines - verse 3
16 lines - chorus (2x)
outro

Now this is a very standard rap song, and ,of course, not every song has to be that way, but since beats are usually constructed that way as wel, I'd try to use this rhyming sheme as much as possibly (makes it easier for the producers as wel )

GOVERNMENT TOO WRAPPED UP IN OTHER PEOPLES WARS
SHOULD HAV LOOKED AFTER THEIR OWN COUNTRY STUPID FUCKS.
OUR YOUNG SOLDIERS ARE GETTIN KILLED EVERYDAY
WI SUICIDE BOMBERS IN BIG FUCKIN TRUCKS.
LET THE YOUTH OF TODAY COME HOME FRAE AFGHAN N IRAQ
LET THEM ENJOY THEIR FAMILY LIFE BRING THEM BACK

^^ This doesn't really fit in either, the first 4 lines are in a abcb rhyming schedule, and the last 2 lines it's aa again (if you know what I mean?)
It gets confusing that way

Try to use internal rhymes, and multi-syllable rhymes as wel, it makes it a lot easier to keep the flow of your song smooth!

----dead-----bread
----head-----wet

= internal rhyme

And this uncontrollable urge-at-times
makes me reminisce on my early-rhymes

= multi-syllable rhyme
it's an awful example, but the best I can come up with at the moment


good try tho'!
keep working..

 

[amor77]

thanks for opinions and info Pain Of Depth
much luv

 

[Bigg Limn]

doooesnt belong here

 

[damir]

YOUTH OF TODAY

WHEN KIDS GETTIN SHOT OR STABBED DRIVEBYS THE LOT
MUTHAFUCKIN BAD GUYS NEVER GET CAUGHT.
STREETS AINT SAFE NO MORE

stephen armour
2/11/77
todays date
13/9/07

So true. stay safe. peace and respect to your lyrics.

showing luv. !

 

[Lil KaMiKaZe]

Like my oooooooooooooooooooold,very old friend Pain of depth just said...first off,write "structured verses"...watch the syllables in yo' lines so the flow won't be off,a verse is usually 16lines but this isn't that important,it depends on the beat...
the theme is good,i mean,it changes from clubs song makin' 80% of rappers today albums...the theme is good but already been "rapped" about million times so to get it original play with yo' styles,like adding methaphors,play-wordz...

...Keep improving...

Return The Favor http://www.streethop.com/forums/showthread.php?t=94309


(Pain Of Deth Pm me,lol we gon' talk about the old dayz )

 

[Czv]

it's a start, just keep on writing, that always improves lyricism.

 

[HoodHumanitarian]

I feel the message, but with all the unnecessary cussing, doesn't seem like it's for the youth