Make Believe

[MonroeThaDon]

just a little something i wrote 4 a chick who did me wrong.
any feedback would be appreciated, good or bad

---------Make Believe----------

ur completely amazing
with much sex appeal
at times i'd pinch myself
2 make sure u was real
id race down your beauty
if i could keep up the pace
i dont have a fan club
i dont have ur face
chasing you**wasting me **amazing you** like make believe
it was hard 2 explain
that world i get lost in
i loved you 4 always
eventho You hurt me so often

if i'd pinch myself
would you still remain
if u walked in my shoes
maybe u'd feel the same shame
but u can't understand
how it feels to be me
2 be in the hands of another
is not 2 be free
im caught up in u
somehow still standing stall
not often thought of ,its true
thats how u made me feel small
chasing you**wasting me**amazing you**like make believe
its 2 hard 2 explain
the petty world ur so lost in
u make advances at men
then take a shit on them, fuck em'

u think ur amazing
but ur making me ill
i bet at night u pinch urself
2 make sure its still real
id race down your bullshit
if i could keep up my patience
my life lived 2 u, loyal
ur lies made me waste it

im loosing you now
4 wasting me then
i'll save you ur time
no need 2 be friends
its not hard 2 explain
the innocent world i got lost in
ur intentions discention
led you 2 shit on me often

if i'd pinch myself
would you still be there
the distance between us
makes me not even care
u dont understand
how it feels to be me
my life demands the love of another
not 2 or 3
im caught up in u
& somehow still standing tall
not often thought of,its true
in ur attempts 2 make me feel small

all the while i was chasing you
u was so busy wasting me
amazing liar you
you live like make believe
its not that hard 2 explain
u remain in the selfish world ur caught up in
all the attention u sought
made me feel long 4gotten 2 often

so, no more killing me
& no more crown on you
ur cartoons & make believe
fuck that shit, bitch, and we're thru


this shit's been long overdue

 

[shattered dreams]

im loosing you now
4 wasting me then
i'll save you ur time
no need 2 be friends
its not hard 2 explain
the innocent world i got lost in
ur intentions discention
led you 2 shit on me often


thats my favorite part, its thoughts people feel alot. i know where your coming from. nice poem keep it up

 

[MonroeThaDon]

Thnx 4 the feedback and im glad u liked it. Sorry tho 2 hear that u've been in that spot, its a bad one 2 be in, but haven't we all been there at one time? Either way i just wanted 2 thank u 4 taking the time 2 read that and gthe feed back, i appreacite that.

 

[~live2tell~]

mistakes huh, you gotta make them to gain knowledge.

my fave part is same as WhenUrherofalls - keep writing

 

[MonroeThaDon]

thnx 4 tha luv sara, i appreciate it much

 

[Levendi]

this got better as i got further through it, i like how u started pinching yourself and chasing after her beauty, and by the end you flipped those lines of you chasing after her bulls#*t.

Also this was dope -
" u dont understand
how it feels to be me
my life demands the love of another
not 2 or 3 "


Pretty good man, keep ya head up...

.

 

[Buck_Buck_Bing]

corny, and boring, never mind, im sure you have better