One day

[The.Menace]

One day

I'm supposed 2 feel strength but see
powerless I hang here, strugglin 2 be
Took a week off but it barely helped
It's exhausting 2 care about everybody else
includin my own lil silly life
I wish just 2 die, dunno if it's wrong or right
but it would be an end - you know
For years I struggle, feelin low
People don't understand, how could they
never ever saw life my way
or walked a mile in my heavy boots
My life is about destiny, there's nothing 2 choose
I didn't want my mother 2 be sick
my granddad 2 suffer or me 2 live and that's it
If just...ya all wouldn't keep me here
it would be so easy, I wouldn't feel no fear
if I'd out that gun 2 my head, ready 2 be dead
I'd smile while pullin that trigger like I always said
and one day I will - I just don't want you
2 clean up my fragmented brain, and that's why I don't do
what I feel like - but one day, everything will change
after I buried ya all I'll set free the rage
Oh boy believe me I will but please don't cry
it's been a long time since I got by
Sufferin too long, just a pro in hidin my pain
...but one day I'll be free....when I blaze out my brain


.

 

[GhettoStar]

One day

I'm supposed 2 feel strength but see
powerless I hang here, strugglin 2 be
Took a week off but it barely helped
It's exhausting 2 care about everybody elseincludin my own lil silly life
I wish just 2 die, dunno if it's wrong or right
but it would be an end - you know
For years I struggle, feelin low
People don't understand, how could they
never ever saw life my way
or walked a mile in my heavy boots
My life is about destiny, there's nothing 2 choose
I didn't want my mother 2 be sick
my granddad 2 suffer or me 2 live and that's itIf just...ya all wouldn't keep me here
it would be so easy, I wouldn't feel no fear
if I'd out that gun 2 my head, ready 2 be dead
I'd smile while pullin that trigger like I always said
and one day I will - I just don't want you
2 clean up my fragmented brain, and that's why I don't do
what I feel like - but one day, everything will change
after I buried ya all I'll set free the rage
Oh boy believe me I will but please don't cry
it's been a long time since I got by
Sufferin too long, just a pro in hidin my pain
...but one day I'll be free....when I blaze out my brain


.

Always with the sucidal....but I enjoyed this espcially the view inside your world of hurt. By sharing those pieces of info it allows the reader to visulize how it would be in your shoes or, rather, how you and him/her have a lot in common. Simple but yet deep, I enjoyed this piece.

 

[ArtsyGirl]

Including what GhettoStar highlighted I also liked:

For years I struggle, feelin low
People don't understand, how could they
never ever saw life my way
or walked a mile in my heavy boots

Cant say I relate to it, but I see why you wrote it. Just hope one day never comes

 

[k69atie]

wow menace this is real deep, really well written

 

[SiGh]

One day

I'm supposed 2 feel strength but see
powerless I hang here, strugglin 2 be
Took a week off but it barely helped
It's exhausting 2 care about everybody else
includin my own lil silly life
I wish just 2 die, dunno if it's wrong or right
but it would be an end - you know
For years I struggle, feelin low
People don't understand, how could they
never ever saw life my way
or walked a mile in my heavy boots
My life is about destiny, there's nothing 2 choose
I didn't want my mother 2 be sick
my granddad 2 suffer or me 2 live and that's it
If just...ya all wouldn't keep me here
it would be so easy, I wouldn't feel no fear
if I'd out that gun 2 my head, ready 2 be dead
I'd smile while pullin that trigger like I always said
and one day I will - I just don't want you
2 clean up my fragmented brain, and that's why I don't do
what I feel like - but one day, everything will change
after I buried ya all I'll set free the rage
Oh boy believe me I will but please don't cry
it's been a long time since I got by
Sufferin too long, just a pro in hidin my pain
...but one day I'll be free....when I blaze out my brain


.

Damn tommy, you have a way of putting words that make u realize mad shit in life. Poem is very deep, well written like katie said, but as I talk to u, hope the things you writing bout dont happen.

But write more, let it out of ur system, cleanse it, that'll set u free.

 

[The.Menace]

Thx a lot, glad 2 see that at least some people take time to reply. Appreachiated.

 

[Kadafi Son]

Thx a lot, glad 2 see that at least some people take time to reply. Appreachiated.

Know whatcha mean...

But damn...deep shit from u man. One day is kinda always in tha back of my head 2, but I remember what I got 2 live 4. Remember, you 2 significant in a lot of peoples live 4 that one day to happen. Just take it e-z. Thats all i can say...

peace

 

[The.Menace]

I love that people talk about the topic, the msg rather than the lines itself cause that means you got into it. That doesn't mean that you can't comment the rhymes itself, btw. So, thx for replyin, thx a lot.

 

[~live2tell~]

This is one of your drops that I find difficult to read but once I have I feel glad that I did. Don't stop

 

[The.Menace]

I think it's quite easy to read actually, . Thanks for the feedback and you know - can't stop, won't stop.

 

[*Riaz*]

One day

I'm supposed 2 feel strength but see
powerless I hang here, strugglin 2 be
Took a week off but it barely helped
It's exhausting 2 care about everybody else
includin my own lil silly life
I wish just 2 die, dunno if it's wrong or right
but it would be an end - you know
For years I struggle, feelin low
People don't understand, how could they
never ever saw life my way
or walked a mile in my heavy boots
My life is about destiny, there's nothing 2 choose
I didn't want my mother 2 be sick
my granddad 2 suffer or me 2 live and that's it
If just...ya all wouldn't keep me here
it would be so easy, I wouldn't feel no fear
if I'd out that gun 2 my head, ready 2 be dead
I'd smile while pullin that trigger like I always said
and one day I will - I just don't want you
2 clean up my fragmented brain, and that's why I don't do
what I feel like - but one day, everything will change
after I buried ya all I'll set free the rage
Oh boy believe me I will but please don't cry
it's been a long time since I got by
Sufferin too long, just a pro in hidin my pain
...but one day I'll be free....when I blaze out my brain


.

Dam Homie where do i start with this...Poem's like this inspire me to write!!

This is awesome,Your talking about me right there
Everyline you dropped ther i felt,Thanx for this G!

P.s i came & check this out after reading your other thread!
Going to peep more of your shit homie :thumb:

Pz

 

[The.Menace]

Dam Homie where do i start with this...Poem's like this inspire me to write!!

This is awesome,Your talking about me right there
Everyline you dropped ther i felt,Thanx for this G!

P.s i came & check this out after reading your other thread!
Going to peep more of your shit homie :thumb:

Pz

Thanks a lot for leavin some feedback, thanks for the kind words - it's always nice to hear that someone feels your poems esp if you're stuck in a situation like I am right now.

P.S: I knew somehow you'd feel the dark poems, . Direct links to pretty much all poems I posted on here can be found on my profile page so just click on my username,

 

[*Riaz*]

Thanks a lot for leavin some feedback, thanks for the kind words - it's always nice to hear that someone feels your poems esp if you're stuck in a situation like I am right now.

P.S: I knew somehow you'd feel the dark poems, . Direct links to pretty much all poems I posted on here can be found on my profile page so just click on my username,

N/p homie, ima go peep the rest no doubt!

 

[KMSinya]

The part where what you wouldn't love more to do then blow your brains out, but don't because of the people you love that are still here is priceless to me.

I can relate.

I question my own existence, but the answer for being here is the ones around me. We're too unselfish for suicide.

 

[The.Menace]

thx for the replies.

 

[SicC]

deep shit brother, i can relate to this poem all to weel and i to understand the burden of such a silly life we have to live. Im digging this shit a lot and it would be a great honor if me and u could someday drop a collab on some ish.

pz

 

[The.Menace]

At least 80% of my stuff is deep, cause that's what poetry is about. Thx for replyin SiCc, I haven't done collabs in quite a while, but maybe we can figure out a topic or whatever one day.