Poisoned Seeds

[jm5471]

i wrote thins thinkin bout rapists who rape little kids n girls n shit, it fuckin really bothers me how sick these fucks are so here it is, its kinds all over the play in a few parts but its jus my expressions

at the time do they understand the full or long term effects
do they mind the pain they've caused
or the morals of life they've neglected 2 see
so i hope they mind, one day they'll rewind and see
theres more than what they believe
"Y Were They Conceived"?????
a poisoned see who was poised n intruiged
in taking whats pure
and destroying it wit their greed, tho they may succeed
the victim will never achieve relief from their grief
no more 2 speak, im sure u agree
y do some take, break and rape others
bodies, minds and souls then flee
living life care free leaving the impaired 2 grieve
from what they've received
fuck all the rapests they should all be deceased
"NEVER 2 REST IN PEACE"


i appriciate all of ur feed back n comments

 

[~live2tell~]

i wrote thins thinkin bout rapists who rape little kids n girls n shit, it fuckin really bothers me how sick these fucks are so here it is, its kinds all over the play in a few parts but its jus my expressions

at the time do they understand the full or long term effects
do they mind the pain they've caused
or the morals of live they've neglected 2 see
so i hope they mind, one day they'll rewind and see
theres more than what they believe
"Y Were They Conceived"?????
a poisoned see who was poised n intruiged
in taking whats pure
and destroying it wit their greed, tho they may succeed
the victim will never achieve relief from their grief
no more 2 speak, im sure u agree
y do some take, break and rape others
bodies, minds and souls then flee
living life care free leaving the impaired 2 grieve
from what they've received
fuck all the rapests they should all be deceased
"NEVER 2 REST IN PEACE"


i appriciate all of ur feed back n comments

Good piece of writing, very powerful and well written.

My fave part>>>

and destroying it wit their greed, tho they may succeed
the victim will never achieve relief from their grief

Nice work - keep it up

 

[jm5471]

thanks for checkin it out

 

[Belo]

Yeh man I totally feel this one..I have one very similar and I agree 101% with wat ur saying..
Wont quote a part because the whole thing was on point.
Keep writing
Peace
Belo

 

[jm5471]

good looks belo on the reply, yea ive done a few like this cause i jus dont understand how people can do this to children and women anyone, its so fucking messed up and it destroys the victim for the rest of their life, also i have a friend who i think was abused as a child by her dad and i am almost sure that he also sexually abused or raped her, but she hasnt told me that yet, it jus seems that way to me and as a guy i think that its soooooooooooooo fuckkkkkkkkkeeedddd uuuupppppp.......im out thanks

 

[shattered dreams]

fuck all the rapests they should all be deceased
"NEVER 2 REST IN PEACE"


those were my favorite lines. sums up a lot. in two lines. nice topic. The only thing is i couldnt tell if it was suppossed to rhyme or not. The rhyming schemes were off. but other than that nice topic.

 

[jm5471]

thanks, yea its all over the place when i type, its alot easier when i read them

 

[MaKa\/eLiThaD0N]

a poisoned see who was poised n intruiged
in taking whats pure
and destroying it wit their greed, tho they may succeed
the victim will never achieve relief from their grief
no more 2 speak, im sure u agree
y do some take, break and rape others
bodies, minds and souls then flee
living life care free leaving the impaired 2 grieve
from what they've received
fuck all the rapests they should all be deceased
"NEVER 2 REST IN PEACE"

liked it from that point on

 

[jm5471]

thanks for checkin it out

 

[jm5471]

i was lookin it over and i added this at the end

tho this will never cease
a quote from pac off the top of my head
there will Never B Peace
so God Bless The Dead.....

jus a lil more

 

[SeX KiTTeN]

Wow...I'm in such awe with this one.

Liked this part (especially the bits in bold):

"a poisoned see who was poised n intruiged
in taking whats pure
and destroying it wit their greed, tho they may succeed
the victim will never achieve relief from their grief"

A really well written poem with a well-chosen topic.

 

[jm5471]

thanks 4 checkin it out

 

[Buck_Buck_Bing]

this was lovely, nice one, better then the others u wrote

 

[jm5471]

hope u enjoyed

 

[kman_69]

ive written a peice on a similar topic....its nothing something thats discussed enough i find...

dope drop....def feelin this one

keep it up

 

[xXHizzo.M40Xx]

This poem is pretty deep. I like it a lot as i share the same feelings you have. Keep it up

 

[jm5471]

good looks thanks 4 checkin it out

 

[kman_69]

Pedophiles -9 Nov 2003
its a disgrace to think what a child rapist takes
what their breakin' is a place that can never be replaced
-& these rapists are shameless, they no what their takin'
yet they'll blatantly debate their fate in a court case
n' i cant figure how their livin' is any different
from someone who riddles out bullets for a livin'
its ridiculous how they can escape imprisonment
consider whats lifted from the childrens innocent spirits
fuck a sentence in prison, deliver em' some belligerence
-i say hit em' wit bricks n shit until their incoherent
& cant hear shit except the silience of righteousness
to me its seems right, i dont condone violence
but a little is required to provide a kind of pride
for the child that'll be described as a case for life.


think i posted this hear a while ago...but thought id post it in here...just coz its on the same kinda tip as your peice...

 

[jm5471]

i like it, and same concept was good