Prejudice

[Bender]

People say they don't understand what I write (until I put forth an explanation) so I thought I'd try and write something a little more understandable, on the theme of Prejudice:


The rotten poisoned core, of
-just one devout selection.
Unvalid in its form, yet it's
-seen like an erection.

On a rise out of an ignorance, one
-became a too slothful mind.
Looking to rest inside a decision,
-attracting its chains that bind.

It should have a view of hate, but
-that meaning gets confused.
Not one can treat it right, when
-conscience thinks it as a tool.

But its cure is understanding,
where it has it's own dominion.
'I am not born of dislike, but
-a simple plain opinion'.

 

[kman_69]

this was cool....nice flow

....but yeah, i can see how you might have to put forth explanations on what your talking about sometimes... hehe

peace.

 

[Hennessy]

1st off, nice vocab and nice wording and placement.

The structure was good, the concept was nice, a common topic, but a nice approach.

Not one can treat it right, when
-conscience thinks it as a tool.

good line.

 

[The_Destroyer]

Structure was weird, but the message was smooth and true. Keep it up man, this piece was nice.

 

[~live2tell~]

i thought it was a good strong poem, had good direction and meaning, you used good vocab and it was solid, really liked the last verse, nice work yeshua