russian roulette

[ImmortalTech]

I was bored, so i just threw on an instrumental and started writing.. it was pretty much a keystyle, so i know it aint great. But i havent been up on here lately so i just decided to post it regardless if its wack or not
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Last night I played Russian roulette with death//
Squeezed the trigga for the 3rd time thinking of my last breath//
Lil did I know it was not my time//
God had sent a miracle down from heaven, and blessed my nine//
I was sick n tired of the world, thinking theres nothing left//
A place full of scandalous girls, and countless threats//
A society built on cheating and adulterous sex//
Whats the point of living a life that gets no respect//
Pushin dope on the corner, never earned me no lex//
So fuck these rappers talking about G’z from coke//
All I got is a bad habit and nose bleeds from coke//
Agitated muhfucker, who needed more than just tree’s to smoke//
Chasing my last high, getting nowhere in life//
Makin’ another dollar, as another husband cheats on his wife//
Slanging these hoes to perverts, and rich white men//
Having nightmares of beating myself if I was ever stuck in the pen//
Still a smart lil hustla, who’d jack anything in sight//
Stacked much dollars, mostly spent on Columbian white//
Stuck in the dungeon of my criminal mind//
Loked for an exit but it was too hard to find//
So I stuck the gat to my head, hoping, god please gimme a sign//

...sorry didnt have the brain power to come up with a proper title for the peice

 

[nebb1234]

muthafuckin dope . (<--- period)

 

[ImmortalTech]

thanks for the look nebb

any criticism at all??...

 

[The.Menace]

I like it, I think this has great potental. I mean, it's good but if you take some time you feel that it's a free/keystyle. It's a really good keystyle, don't get me wrong, but you might take another look and work on it a lil bit - then it would be a great piece.

 

[WayCide-Ridah]

nice lil piece, good for some quick shit....
if worked on damn, this be an ill verse to drop in the studio....

I couldn't find anything wrong, that's just my opinion

 

[ImmortalTech]

word... thanks for the looks

~peace

 

[bigCASH]

yeah i was feeling this piece to...i like it cause you paint a good picture.

 

[Shot 21]

If these are your keystyle, then you got skills. I take it you hate cheating and adultery.