So Right

#1
So Right - 14 May 2006
i'm just so far to the left, ive gone right of the gauge
..and gone right around till ive become right -its all the same
-lame issues people talk about as if their makin a difference
you know whats really different? -people sticking to the middle, its
-being persistent in what you believe is the right thing to do
coz opposite views can end up with the same perspective too
and in truth, whether its you or the next fighter in the ring..
-its all an illusions, theres really no rivals ..just human beings.
 
#2
I read this over and over again, I think this is the most perfect poem I've ever read. The first line is dope, the left-right and how it's all the same at the end. Flow is perfect, the rhyming is unique and encourages the reader to read it again and the length is perfect, not too stressful for the brain. :)
 
#3
aw thanks Kat!, "I think this is the most perfect poem I've ever read" ....now thats a fuckin compliment if ever i saw one!! hehe

thanks for peepin! glad u feelin this one! :)
 

The.Menace

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#6
I don't agree with it beein the most perferct poem I've ever read. Not to disrespect you kman, I think I don't really feel it that way I guess. I still think it's good and I like the ending a lot - I just wish it would be the case, you know....all my life is about competition.

peace
 
#8
i'm just so far to the left, ive gone right of the gauge
..and gone right around till ive become right -its all the same
nice, i liked this, creative and simple at the same time


-being persistent in what you believe is the right thing to do
coz opposite views can end up with the same perspective too
true, i liked the wording, sounded really natural


nice poem, short, nice creativity for such a short poem, didn't have to sit and try to figure things out but at the same time it had alot of complexity.
 
#9
Hennessy said:
i'm just so far to the left, ive gone right of the gauge
..and gone right around till ive become right -its all the same
nice, i liked this, creative and simple at the same time


-being persistent in what you believe is the right thing to do
coz opposite views can end up with the same perspective too
true, i liked the wording, sounded really natural


nice poem, short, nice creativity for such a short poem, didn't have to sit and try to figure things out but at the same time it had alot of complexity.
thanks man, i feel what your sayin....i think thats what kat meant as well...by saying it was perfect, that its easy to read...yet complex... :)


thanks for peepin!

peace.
 
#10
kman_69 said:
So Right - 14 May 2006
i'm just so far to the left, ive gone right of the gauge
..and gone right around till ive become right -its all the same
-lame issues people talk about as if their makin a difference
you know whats really different? -people sticking to the middle, its
-being persistent in what you believe is the right thing to do
coz opposite views can end up with the same perspective too
and in truth, whether its you or the next fighter in the ring..
-its all an illusions, theres really no rivals ..just human beings.
This is a short poem and i feel what ya sayin.......You was straight to tha point.......That woz real...............
 
#12
C.J.Mak said:
This is a short poem and i feel what ya sayin.......You was straight to tha point.......That woz real...............

hey thanks man!...sorry its taken me so long to reply....im overseas atm...

thanks heaps for peepin!

peace.
 
#13
Tha Thug Poet said:
man that was tight. My favorite was the first and the last line. It's so true to life though it's unrealistic. HAHA...as always keep it up

true to life yet unrealistic...hehe i like that....

thanks for peepin man!

peace.
 
#14
Very cleverly written, and I think this is one of your best. You kept it simple and easy to understand although your message could have gone a different way, it didn't you kept focussed and created a great piece here.
 

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