Tommy ‘n’ Me

[XIAN]

wow I didn't see this one before. So creative! It's like Hiphopera or something. But it flows like a story and it is very drama-like. Good job.

~peace~

 

[Devious]

good stuff menace and live2tell, i really liked this one

 

[The.Menace]

thx for replyin Devious and Xian, glad you liked it.

 

[ArtsyGirl]

Very nice, loved the ending and you both kept my attention all the way thru! Congrats.

 

[CESARE BORGIA]

Live2tell: How can you call me your baby?
Why pretend you can save me?
When you obviously wanna be free
Took a while but now I see

Menace: Come on, I was drunken and high
You knew I live like I’m destined to die
That’s who I am, I don’t lie
But still I don’t want you to cry

I liked the begining, thats what got me hooked into reading the rest, thats tight how its like a convo, it keeps it intresting, good work, i realy felt this.

 

[The.Menace]

thx for the feedback guys.

 

[~live2tell~]

wow this thread is still very much alive thx for all your feedback guys and gals, much appreciated

 

[The.Menace]

amazing isn't it baby?

 

[kimbo_thug]

Normaly when i see such long poems i skim thorught them
but with this one i was hook
one of tha best poems ive read on tha site so far
nice work keep it up xx

 

[The.Menace]

Thanks kimbo, appreachiated a lot. See ya around.