All I c

[The.Menace]

All I c

I feel like you can say everything with lyrics
from death and drama 2 party and chicks
I want my life 2 be written down one day
A poem for my birth 'n for every step on my way
until my death and beyond, I live 2 tell
my story and I hope yours as well
My poetry is my reason 2 live, my air
2 breath, my tears and my pain when I care
when I'm touched, my joy and my high
all at the same time, don't u understand I
live and die for all this, 4 my poetry
cause whatever there is, rhymes is all I c

 

[ArtsyGirl]

Like I said Good Work

 

[Devious]

I really like this one, it flows nicely, and not as dark as some of your other poems. don't get me wrong, i like those too, but its nice to have an upbeat one once in a while lol

 

[Bigg Limn]

Yeah this was pretty nice...wasnt feelin it 2 much at first - but the last half was nice, really flowed well - think the rhyming helped pick that up. Good shit though, definately can relate.

 

[kimbo_thug]

Nice poem ya got here
like to see a longer version of it maybe ?
x

 

[Sebastian]

nice flow plus nice idea. i liked it.

 

[tHuG $TyLe]

The concept was cool. The poem was good. The flow at times was messed up, parts i had to re read.

But in all it was a decent poem.

 

[Kaos88]

yeh good work man...well done. nicely wrote, some good lines in there

 

[~live2tell~]

I like this, it’s kinda carefree somehow, and very truthful.

The flow at the end seemed a little off, it seemed to me that when I finished the last line it didn’t fit quite right with the rest, or maybe I just didn’t want it to end just then.

 

[Tha Thug Poet]

damn man...good to see that u still writing. IT wasnt as dark as ur other stuff but it would make for a nice hook on a cd also. Keep up the good work homie

 

[Saint33]

real good :thumb: i like these lines

I want my life 2 be written down one day
A poem for my birth 'n for every step on my way
until my death and beyond, I live 2 tell
my story and I hope yours as well

very interesting :thumb:

 

[The.Menace]

Thx anyone for the replies, yes that's a short piece just expressin my state of mind. Anyway, ThugStyle, I dont't mind if you had to reread it, cause this is poetry, not hiphop, it doesn't have 2 flow all good the first time you read it, I like it if the writin is a lil more complex and people really have to focus a lil to get the hang of the rhymes and the flow.

Peace and once more, thank ya all for your time.

 

[~live2tell~]

^ yeah it does have to flow and rhyme, don't act like that's not important to you actually I'm gonna forward all my poems that the flow got messed up in or that don't rhyme and see if you actually bother reading them

 

[The.Menace]

I don't care about people rereadin it, of course I care about the flow and the rhyme. Do you agree that the flow is messed up? I don't see it, that's my point....

 

[Sebastian]

^
no its not.

 

[~live2tell~]

I don't care about people rereadin it, of course I care about the flow and the rhyme. Do you agree that the flow is messed up? I don't see it, that's my point....

I misunderstood sorry, but no it's not messed up

 

[The.Menace]

Thx, now I can sleep better.

 

[Kadafi Son]

(It's a miracle you had about 3 replies of your first day of posting this)

Short and simple, Menace. I agree with everybody elses opinion that its not as dark as your others, but kinda more optimistic & dreamful. Not my favorite one I've read from you, but still tight.

And yes. I had to go back in time 8 months since there aren't any new poems up. I'm thinking about maybe writing one more and leaving this forum. Theres just not enough appreciation of poetry on a 2pac site. Let me know if I'm wrong or not, but I'm just not feeling any influence on here

 

[The.Menace]

not my favorite one I've read from you, but still tight.

Well, I know it's not that good, I don't like it too much myself. I like the msg cause this is how I feel sometimes (or quite often I don't know) so I felt like sharing. No one of my best, not at all, I agree.

 

[*Riaz*]

thats deep tommy,keep em coming homie!