Beautiful Bird

#1
The night becomes a visual silence.
Air blowing but no whistle.
I can see -
The limbs on the tree moving.
But no sound of brustling leaves.

In the distance I hear it.
Like the flight of a spirit.
I follow -
The sound remains grounded
In a remote tree rounded and hollow

The wings spread through the air
Like a child consuming the womb.
I listen -
Predicting a sudden movement
To ruin this moment. Reminiscent

Of every beautiful thing
Thats been taken away.
I sigh -
But I return for the glory
Of this untold story of flight.

This creature has no features,
No height or no weight.
Just sound. -
But I imagine it's radiance
Could demolish hate in a single bound.

As the wind makes way
For the feathered arms to wave.
I flush -
All the pain from my soul
And rememeber, life isn't in a rush.
 
#3
Ah shiittt :) Now I've said it b4 & I still stand by it... Your poetry Josh Is amazing.. I luVv your style of writing, I like your messages.. I luVv tha feel of your work - & This aint nothang new! I felt it & I completely dug it!

Of every beautiful thing
Thats been taken away.
I sigh -
But I return for the glory
Of this untold story of flight.

This creature has no features,
No height or no weight.
Just sound. -
But I imagine it's radiance
Could demolish hate in a single bound.

As the wind makes way
For the feathered arms to wave.
I flush -
All the pain from my soul
And rememeber, life isn't in a rush.


Tha Whole poem is great Josh, but I got 2 this part & I was like daaaayyuummm! Honestly, the way you finished this up is sweet! Feelin this babiiboi! keep it up :)

peace
 

Kadafi Son

Well-Known Member
#4
I didn't really like this one. Not that its a bad poem, its just that these types of poems don't draw me in. You did have good usage of words though.
 

The.Menace

Well-Known Member
Staff member
#5
very nice msg but I personally don't like the absence of rhymes in the first two lines of every verse. :) But you show that you thought about the structure, I like that.
 

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