By running

Jokerman

Well-Known Member
#1
We can get together
Talk, sing the old songs
We can keep each other's spirits up
After awhile it sounds real
We will believe it
With lies we can ease the pain
To kill the pain would be good
Looking for a way out of it
At the end of the night we separate
We becomes I
And then it gets real
That can be hard
The nights get cold
The emptiness so huge
The everything so all the time
That's why we cling
Like leaves to a shivering tree
Trying to hide from death
By running headlong into its mouth
 
#2
good stuff man...i liked this piece. really liked these lines:

With lies we can ease the pain

The nights get cold
The emptiness so huge

nice work
 

Helena

Active Member
#3
Jokerman said:
We can get together
Talk, sing the old songs
We can keep each other's spirits up
After awhile it sounds real
We will believe it
With lies we can ease the pain
To kill the pain would be good
Looking for a way out of it
At the end of the night we separate
We becomes I
And then it gets real
That can be hard
The nights get cold
The emptiness so huge
The everything so all the time
That's why we cling
Like leaves to a shivering tree
Trying to hide from death
By running headlong into its mouth
i love these lines...
With lies we can ease the pain
Trying to hide from death
By running headlong into its mouth
wise words
 

XIAN

New Member
#5
To me this is like the death of something, whether it be a person or the death of some kind of relationship. It reminds me of a person because you are separating from that person, and then it "gets real" and you realize you're alone, like the shock after a death. It seems like a relationship because of the way that you both "lie" to keep it up and then you're away and you realize that it's dead.

Good images though and great poem...

~peace~
 

Elmira

Well-Known Member
#7
Ah, the pitfalls of being human.

Your reality is clearly represented here. Good work; unfortunate circumstances.
 
#8
I thought this very good, very good indeed.

I feel it has an eerie edge once read, I don’t know whether this was intended, but it’s certainly what it makes me feel – slightly on edge.

Great poem
 
#9
The whole thing was great. seems like it came striaght from ur heart. the last two lines stuck out the most because they're so damn true

Jokerman said:
Trying to hide from death
By running headlong into its mouth
keep writin homie
 
#10
i rilly rilly enjoyed this, it kinda has this unsettling feeling about it, but at the same time it almost makes u feel safe, or not alone. Keep up the good work man this was rilly dope :thumb:
 

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