Can U Hear Me - Solo version

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Malkz

Member
#2
#2
"Out service will be unavailabile for next 3 hours.

Please come back later."

... guess i gotta check it later! look forward 2 hearing it..
 
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Drunk On Whisky

New Member
#3
#3
wuddup bro.. this is neek...

"whats my purpose".. "im trying to change em"... "rob and rape em".. "whats gonna be at the site "... "understand..im one of you"... "wont go hard".." bust on ya whole squad! "...

I like this duke.. only thing..sometimes..you put too many words into one bar. So what I can offer you..is a smidge of advice.. just do a measurement count on your lyrics while you're writing..like..the beat has a 4 count per bar...

1...2.(snare)..3...4...(snare).. count your lyrics like that..with the 1...2...3...4... keep there tempo inside the measurement... you dont wanna slow down/speed up at anytime.. an to keep your flow from going stale..just play with wordplacement...

instead of going " rah rah rah rhyme/ rah rah rah rhyme "...switch it up sometimes like..

" rah rah rhyme.. rah rhyme/ rah rah rhyme.. rah rhyme/ rah rhyme, rah rah rah rhyme/ " just play with the measurement/word placement stuff... your flow itself.. like the way you can carry a bar and what not is good.. alot better than I expected it to be.. which I had a high expectation as is.. but you exceeded it.

I didnt find your mixxing to be as bad as you made it seem on aim either. I can still give you some dope advice.. so email me or something..or try an catch me on aim and I got you bro.


peaceful!
 
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Mr. G

New Member
#4
#4
u have potential man, good concious shit, keep it up.

oh and what he said :thumb: :
Drunk On Whisky said:
wuddup bro.. this is neek...

"whats my purpose".. "im trying to change em"... "rob and rape em".. "whats gonna be at the site "... "understand..im one of you"... "wont go hard".." bust on ya whole squad! "...

I like this duke.. only thing..sometimes..you put too many words into one bar. So what I can offer you..is a smidge of advice.. just do a measurement count on your lyrics while you're writing..like..the beat has a 4 count per bar...

1...2.(snare)..3...4...(snare).. count your lyrics like that..with the 1...2...3...4... keep there tempo inside the measurement... you dont wanna slow down/speed up at anytime.. an to keep your flow from going stale..just play with wordplacement...

instead of going " rah rah rah rhyme/ rah rah rah rhyme "...switch it up sometimes like..

" rah rah rhyme.. rah rhyme/ rah rah rhyme.. rah rhyme/ rah rhyme, rah rah rah rhyme/ " just play with the measurement/word placement stuff... your flow itself.. like the way you can carry a bar and what not is good.. alot better than I expected it to be.. which I had a high expectation as is.. but you exceeded it.

I didnt find your mixxing to be as bad as you made it seem on aim either. I can still give you some dope advice.. so email me or something..or try an catch me on aim and I got you bro.


peaceful!
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Missy "C"

Active Member
#5
#5
I don't know a lot about all this, I'm not in this forum very often, but I just heard your song and I think it's preety good. I loooove your voice, keep posting your audio, I enjoyed a lot this one!

peace
 
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Mr. G

New Member
#6
#6
Missy "C" said:
I don't know a lot about all this, I'm not in this forum very often, but I just heard your song and I think it's preety good. I loooove your voice, keep posting your audio, I enjoyed a lot this one!

peace
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he sounds sexy doesnt he :p
 
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Razorblade

New Member
#8
#8
Nice verse man; love the beat.
Your flow falters a little in places but generally your delivery's nice. Lyrics are emotional but you over-do it when you double your vocals; I dont think you need to do it as often as you have.
 
Bigg Limn

Bigg Limn

Well-Known Member
Staff member
#9
#9
Beat is pretty nice, diggin it. Ur main vocals need 2 be louder, ur backs are a bit off point and theyre 2 high over the mains so it jumbles up the verse a lot. Flow was a bit shakey, mostly it was on point but it fell off/on a lot. Lyrics were nice though, content-wise and structure. Just work on ironing out that flow dawg.

Peace
 
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Lukkey

New Member
#10
#10
Yea cuz its was aight I liked the beat a lil I was feelin u some...just keep mastering ure delivery and shit will come out soundin iller...
 
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crittaz

New Member
#11
#11
you got a good voice. and definitely have potential like some others have said. you flow fell off in numerous parts of the song. on and off on and off. lyrics are good. but keep working on that flow. you got a lot of potential
 
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jeremy_

New Member
#14
#14
first track i have heard from you.
nice beat.
nice flow, not sure about the backing vocals though, maybe if you turned them down a bit?
does sound a bit 2pac like but its ok to be influenced by the best, so long as you develop on your own which i am sure you will.
make it longer!
nice drop though
 
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