chosen one

[The.Menace]

chosen one

A strange mind calls my body his home
Maybe that's why I feel like the chosen one
Sometimes it wasn't easy but I kept going
Kept fightin, kept writin and so in
half a year I might publish my first book
I'm somehow happy - after everything it took
I'm still here - and it's far from being over
Projects in my mind and in my chest Jehovah
I feel like there is a reason 4 me 2 be
feeling like God has his hands on me
Showing me the way through the storm
I love you even if my heart is torn
cause sometimes it all seems 2 be hard
close 2 giving up and losing faith in my heart
but sometimes I feel like I can do it
like this is the right path and I won't screw it
and that's why I keep working until I'm gone
cause sometimes I feel like the chosen one

 

[Kadafi Son]

Yeah. I was feeling this poem. You had a good beginning to it as well. Sometimes, I feel like the chosen one. Chosen to face this misery in my life, but you real cool with this poems. Props

 

[~live2tell~]

I really like this poem of yours Tommy and I'm glad that you decided to post it

I love that its so personal, really like the rhythm and the content/subject I felt was different than others.

My fave parts are:

Projects in my mind and in my chest Jehovah
I feel like there is a reason 4 me 2 be
feeling like God has his hands on me

I love you even if my heart is torn
cause sometimes it all seems 2 be hard
close 2 giving up and losing faith in my heart
but sometimes I feel like I can do it

^ Really feeling the positivity, and I like that from you - keep it up dearie

 

[MATW95]

Can't say anymore than live2tell did. She took the words out of my mouth. I like the rhythm alot

Keep em coming :thumb:

 

[The.Menace]

thx ya all.

 

[The.Menace]

uppin, cause I want 2

 

[Beautiful Angel]

I love you even if my heart is torn
cause sometimes it all seems 2 be hard
close 2 giving up and losing faith in my heart
but sometimes I feel like I can do it

^^ that was my favorites section

i really liked the poem it seemed to flow very well
kept me wanting more
keep it up

*Kel*

 

[assassin_4001]

what can i say exepct this poem is simply a masterpiece , i really liked the flow,,u should keep it up man

 

[Missy "C"]

I'm really feeling this piece, very emotional and i can relate to it in some parts. Mi favorite verses are:

Showing me the way through the storm
I love you even if my heart is torn
cause sometimes it all seems 2 be hard
close 2 giving up and losing faith in my heart

Great piece and keep posting your poems, I really enjoy reading them :thumb:

 

[jm5471]

I feel like there is a reason 4 me 2 be
feeling like God has his hands on me
Showing me the way through the storm
I love you even if my heart is torn
cause sometimes it all seems 2 be hard
close 2 giving up and losing faith in my heart


that was my fav part i really liked how it flowed and the message u were writing

 

[kman_69]

nice 0ne, definetly feelin the flow and everything on this..

whats this about a book?!?

 

[The.Menace]

Thx for all the feedback guys.

Well, kman, I actually try to get my poetry published and yeah, I really work hard on and hopefully I'll succee.

 

[Bender]

Choice, the double edged sword!

This poem is definately hot! Especially these lines:

'cause sometimes it all seems 2 be hard
close 2 giving up and losing faith in my heart
but sometimes I feel like I can do it
like this is the right path and I won't screw it
and that's why I keep working until I'm gone'

Good read.

 

[k69atie]

a very emotional piece, i really enjoyed this. Keep them coming :thumb:

 

[XIAN]

I love you even if my heart is torn
cause sometimes it all seems 2 be hard
close 2 giving up and losing faith in my heart

I relate to that one sure. Good.

~peace~

 

[The.Menace]

Thx ya all for readin this poem, I don't feel it's even close to my bests but it's for real you know what I mean?

 

[Devious]

another very good poem menace. You have a way of making people feel what you're writing, i don't know what it is, just your style i guess. Anyway keep up the good work

 

[The.Menace]

Thx Devious, appreachiated.

 

[ArtsyGirl]

I really like this poem of yours Tommy and I'm glad that you decided to post it

I love that its so personal, really like the rhythm and the content/subject I felt was different than others.

My fave parts are:

Projects in my mind and in my chest Jehovah
I feel like there is a reason 4 me 2 be
feeling like God has his hands on me

I love you even if my heart is torn
cause sometimes it all seems 2 be hard
close 2 giving up and losing faith in my heart
but sometimes I feel like I can do it

^ Really feeling the positivity, and I like that from you - keep it up dearie

Totally Agree! :thumb:
Great Poem Menace

 

[Rahim]

chosen one

and that's why I keep working until I'm gone

My favorite line from this poem is this one right here ^^..Well Done!