Consumers Lust

[kman_69]

Consumers Lust -17 March 2005

i watch the blood shoot out in every direction..
as my credit card separates HER head from her face n'
-my face n' hands get covered in HER blood -i laugh
time speeds up.. fuck, is this the future or the past?
i cant tell anymore.. times just moving too fast
i grab my card again, is that credit or cash??..
at last!.. i get to satisfy my lust again!..
its not enough! -i just love to hear them sufferin'
whats that red stuff? mmm -oh its just blood again..
"oh fuck, thats HER brother man!" -we already killed HER lover n'
..HER mothers head got chopped right off for nothing..(damn)
-now we gotta find another 3rd world fam 2 do our shopping plans!

H.appiness (is for)
E.very
R.ace

 

[Jurhum]

This was very nice. Metaphoric. I enjoyed it. The whole bit was nice. Flow i thought was pretty good.

 

[MX Red]

Capitalism is a bitch, i liked this like Jurhum said - good metaphor....was confused up untill the end - great poem, good ending!
peace
MX!

 

[~live2tell~]

Very well written, I love the concept and your style in this poem is really effective. Its very different from some of the other poems I've read on the board too, its always interesting to interpret peoples writing and thoughts on subject matters such as this right here. Good drop for sure, keep it up.

 

[kman_69]

This was very nice. Metaphoric. I enjoyed it. The whole bit was nice. Flow i thought was pretty good.

thanks man, glad u feelin it.

 

[kman_69]

Capitalism is a bitch, i liked this like Jurhum said - good metaphor....was confused up untill the end - great poem, good ending!
peace
MX!

lol it sure is....yeah i thought this one might be a bit confusing...but im glad u got somethin out of it!

peace!

 

[kman_69]

Very well written, I love the concept and your style in this poem is really effective. Its very different from some of the other poems I've read on the board too, its always interesting to interpret peoples writing and thoughts on subject matters such as this right here. Good drop for sure, keep it up.

aw thanks sara...for real, i find a poem good when it is open to interpretation...makes it more fun to read

thanks for feedback...real glad u feelin it!

peace!

 

[kman_69]

think ive replied to every peice on here...

soooo.....uppin!

 

[Ivory$horty]

Very very nice Kieran. It definately is something I haven't read too much about up on here, but I've come to expect topics like this from you Really loved how you wrote this.
Great drop!

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[kman_69]

Very very nice Kieran. It definately is something I haven't read too much about up on here, but I've come to expect topics like this from you Really loved how you wrote this.
Great drop!

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~

yo thanks Frances .....yeah its a topic nobody seems to want to talk about -but i read some stories recently about a girl that was forced to work for nike for next to nothing ...and the things she had been through at such a young age -losing her family just being one of them....

it not only made me sad....but REALLY pissed me off....that nobody seems to care at all...its fucked

bleh, anyways...thanks for peepin!

peace!

 

[Blunted Dreamz]

this was great! Definately a subject that needs to be 'spattered' around more for sure. I really enjoyed your style writing this, no constructive criticism, only compliments from me....

 

[kman_69]

this was great! Definately a subject that needs to be 'spattered' around more for sure. I really enjoyed your style writing this, no constructive criticism, only compliments from me....

thanks man, i agree...this shit needs tgo be spattered around more.....you a real cat


im fucked up right now....im gonna write some more shit....

peace.