Deepest Fears

[Belo]

Sup ppl, havn't posted a poem in a minute as I've been really busy.. Havn't forgotten bout yall though

Emptiness and darkness, encompassing my life
Rejection always beckoning, why the fuck do people try?
Soon to die by fire so hot but failed to warm our hearts
Relationships like cluster bombs, they blew our worlds apart
Screaming, Jesus can you save me? But damn, I never prayed to thee
And so I die alone, the only thing I can do safely
Has God forsaken me? that’s alright cos I’m a warrior
Each day is like a newspaper, so let me write a story for..
Imploring ya, but still I curse the years adoring ya
Remembering a time before an us, it was just me and her
When no one reads your notebook, the words they stay the same
Trapped within the lines on paper… stays the pain
Fame and fortune promised, disregarded with resentment
Second samples better grasp these sentences of sentiment
Confessionals of sins are filled, intentions of repent
This aint no ghetto, nowhere close, but still it’s hard to pay the rent...

 

[~live2tell~]

That was worth the wait Belo, I really liked it alot. My fave parts are>>

Relationships like cluster bombs, they blew our worlds apart
Screaming, Jesus can you save me? But damn, I never prayed to thee
And so I die alone, the only thing I can do safely

^ Pretty much how I feel about relationships right now so this part really stood out to me.

and this >>

Each day is like a newspaper, so let me write a story for..
Imploring ya, but still I curse the years adoring ya
Remembering a time before an us, it was just me and her

Loved this part because it just fits spesh 'each day is like a newspaper' - awesome.

:thumb:

 

[IMAGINATIVES]

tight drop belo. loved the content and flowed dope. day in and day out i feel ya on this. keep writing bro...

peace one...

 

[The.Menace]

nice to see you postin again, I enjoyed it as always.

 

[jm5471]

Soon to die by fire so hot but failed to warm our hearts
Relationships like cluster bombs, they blew our worlds apart
Screaming, Jesus can you save me? But damn, I never prayed to thee
And so I die alone, the only thing I can do safely

i really liked this part, it flowed really good and the depth was good, a good poem to read and jus think about

 

[Steph]

Screaming, Jesus can you save me? But damn, I never prayed to thee

this line really caught my attetion coz i can relate, great piece, keep posting :thumb:

 

[Cown]

Very nice drop Belo

I like the way you brought out commen points in life in that poem, also the flow was very unique, great poem :thumb:

 

[Buck_Buck_Bing]

This was really good, I think I will print it out and put it on my wall

 

[Belo]

That was worth the wait Belo, I really liked it alot. My fave parts are>>

Relationships like cluster bombs, they blew our worlds apart
Screaming, Jesus can you save me? But damn, I never prayed to thee
And so I die alone, the only thing I can do safely

^ Pretty much how I feel about relationships right now so this part really stood out to me.

and this >>

Each day is like a newspaper, so let me write a story for..
Imploring ya, but still I curse the years adoring ya
Remembering a time before an us, it was just me and her

Loved this part because it just fits spesh 'each day is like a newspaper' - awesome.

:thumb:

THanks heaps gurl.. I appreciate the reply a lot

 

[Belo]

tight drop belo. loved the content and flowed dope. day in and day out i feel ya on this. keep writing bro...

peace one...

Cheers man, nice 2 see u still up in here

 

[Belo]

nice to see you postin again, I enjoyed it as always.

NO doubt, good to be back.. cheers man

 

[Belo]

Soon to die by fire so hot but failed to warm our hearts
Relationships like cluster bombs, they blew our worlds apart
Screaming, Jesus can you save me? But damn, I never prayed to thee
And so I die alone, the only thing I can do safely

i really liked this part, it flowed really good and the depth was good, a good poem to read and jus think about

Thanks man, seems like everyone's fav part

 

[TG1 Ghetto One]

What can i say it was deep liked it all props

 

[Jurhum]

beautiful as usual. Nice word usage. Great meaning. Always anticipating ur poetry man.

 

[MaKa\/eLiThaD0N]

that whole damn thing was deep man could almost pisture pac flowin it on a beat keep on writing B

 

[Belo]

Thanks guys for the replies... always appreciated

 

[Ivory$horty]

Wow....

When no one reads your notebook, the words they stay the same
Trapped within the lines on paper… stays the pain
Fame and fortune promised, disregarded with resentment
Second samples better grasp these sentences of sentiment
Confessionals of sins are filled, intentions of repent
This aint no ghetto, nowhere close, but still it’s hard to pay the rent...

^^ This part was tight as hell pizza boi! It's great to read another drop from you, although I don't think it was your most strongest or creative but I was still definately feelin it either way.
Nice flow, although at times I felt it was a lil off...could be just me though. Your word usage: superb...but like previously stated...not quite like your other pieces (I guess that's what poetry is all about though ) I'm glad you've kept writing though cos I've always loved reading your work. This was no exception.
Keep it up!

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[kman_69]

this was dope man

Has God forsaken me? that’s alright cos I’m a warrior
Each day is like a newspaper, so let me write a story for..
Imploring ya...

^^mad rhyme scheme there, real nice flow..

def feelin this one!

peace.

 

[Belo]

Thanks guys for taking the time

 

[GhettoStar]

Sup ppl, havn't posted a poem in a minute as I've been really busy.. Havn't forgotten bout yall though

Emptiness and darkness, encompassing my life
Rejection always beckoning, why the fuck do people try?
Soon to die by fire so hot but failed to warm our hearts
Relationships like cluster bombs, they blew our worlds apart
Screaming, Jesus can you save me? But damn, I never prayed to thee
And so I die alone, the only thing I can do safely
Has God forsaken me? that’s alright cos I’m a warrior
Each day is like a newspaper, so let me write a story for..
Imploring ya, but still I curse the years adoring ya
Remembering a time before an us, it was just me and her
When no one reads your notebook, the words they stay the same
Trapped within the lines on paper… stays the pain
Fame and fortune promised, disregarded with resentment
Second samples better grasp these sentences of sentiment
Confessionals of sins are filled, intentions of repent
This aint no ghetto, nowhere close, but still it’s hard to pay the rent...

Im feeling this piece of writing cuz the subject matter deals close with all of our hearts as either belivers or as a nation....for it seems that nobody is out there to hear us or listen. Im feeling your writing style because its truth and it tells a stroy of how you feel which is important. The whole point of poetry is to express yourself and you have...good work on this and stay true and I look foward to reading a part 2 of this.