Ghaza's Tears

[assassin_4001]

Abused city shedding tears
For lost children and pears
Human rights unattached to it
As I ponder while I sit
Fearless men accepting grief
Madness considered only brief
Abused city to blind eyes
Deaf ears to her amplified cries
Destructed homes to no repairs
Gaza shrieks in agonizing despair
They boldly speak of freedom
While lacking humanity and wisdom
They enjoy wealth uttering cheers
Ignoring Gaza's dripping tears

 

[kman_69]

They boldly speak of freedom
While lacking humanity and wisdom
They enjoy wealth uttering cheers
Ignoring Gaza's dripping tears

loved the last part man^^... really nice drop man....i can definetly see where your comming from on this one

keep it up man

peace.

 

[assassin_4001]

thanx man

 

[Kadafi Son]

I'm wit kman69. It was a real short poem with short lines but it was still understood to me what you tryna show. I feel ya.

 

[The.Menace]

once more, I like your different style, short lines but rhymin, I like it. About gaza....it's a sad situation and I wish all the people could just live in peace.

 

[Jurhum]

man i loved this one. i can relate to it. wonderful peace..

keep it up

 

[assassin_4001]

thanx everyone

 

[Radafi]

This was really good. I really feel it considering I am Palestinian. Keep up the good work!

 

[MuzlimG]

Props man let em know

 

[ImmortalTech]

nice lil peice, simple, but got the point across

 

[Farzin]

Thats pretty good dude i like it alot and like kman said a long ass time ago that ending is pretty nice. I dont know much about poems and structure and shit so i cant comment on technicalities but i'll tell you what i like it alot.

 

[Ivory$horty]

nice lil peice, simple, but got the point across

Agreed. Really loved the last couple of lines, they complimented this piece beautifully.