I Wish Poem

[Kadafi Son]

I wish I wouldn't have a reason to right this poem/
Step-father beating on my mama, so was the fool before him/
I wish my family would stop arguing and get along/
I cry a lot, but I always remember to remain strong/
I wish I had a girl on my arm, and tell me that I'm a better person/
Someone to hug, someone to kiss whenever my heart starts hurtin/
I wish I had enough money to move my mama out the ghetto/
Only thing to heal my pain is music that sounds mellow/
I wish everyone I knew didn't think that I was crazy/
I was born into this world and this is what the world has made me/
I wish I wouldn't have to see another kid starvin' in this nation/
The nation of riches, is nothing but hypocrits and demolation/
I wish my refridgerator wasn't empty. Just bread and a can of beans/
Around the block is rich neighborhoods. In mines are just drug fiends/
I wish this pain of mine would find a remedy, cuz I'm pissed/
The suicidal part of me took over me. Can you assist?/
I wish I had a friend who understands why I'm in conflict/
We living in a world where your own mind can be illogic/
I wish the world would see me as a mercenary and not a fool/
I feel your pain because I've been there. We living under God's Rule/
I wish that I could rest my soul and awake with a world at peace/
I wish I could get a chance to smile before I will decease/

I Wish-Kadafi Son

 

[Kadafi Son]

Eh, I followed the rules here, but I really want feedback on this particular poem. It was hard thinking about the things I went there on this poem. So please, tell me want you like.

Peace

 

[MATW95]

Kadafi-Son, we'd be real tyte if we knew each other man, you live the same shit I do Brother.

Step-father beating on my mama, so was the fool before him

I wish everyone I knew didn't think that I was crazy

I wish I wouldn't have to see another kid starvin' in this nation/
The nation of riches, is nothing but hypocrits and demolation/

^ Real talk kid. Keep writing with your heart and all your shit will be dope man :thumb:

 

[The.Menace]

It's not about following the rules here, it's about following the rules everyday.

Hey I like this piece. Good rhymes + u have something 2 talk about - this is poetry that I like&love. Good piece so keep it up.

 

[~live2tell~]

I wish I wouldn't have a reason to right this poem/
Step-father beating on my mama, so was the fool before him/
I wish my family would stop arguing and get along/
I cry a lot, but I always remember to remain strong/
I wish I had a girl on my arm, and tell me that I'm a better person/
Someone to hug, someone to kiss whenever my heart starts hurtin/
I wish I had enough money to move my mama out the ghetto/
Only thing to heal my pain is music that sounds mellow/
I wish everyone I knew didn't think that I was crazy/
I was born into this world and this is what the world has made me/
I wish I wouldn't have to see another kid starvin' in this nation/
The nation of riches, is nothing but hypocrits and demolation/
I wish my refridgerator wasn't empty. Just bread and a can of beans/
Around the block is rich neighborhoods. In mines are just drug fiends/
I wish this pain of mine would find a remedy, cuz I'm pissed/
The suicidal part of me took over me. Can you assist?/
I wish I had a friend who understands why I'm in conflict/
We living in a world where your own mind can be illogic/
I wish the world would see me as a mercenary and not a fool/
I feel your pain because I've been there. We living under God's Rule/
I wish that I could rest my soul and awake with a world at peace/
I wish I could get a chance to smile before I will decease/

I Wish-Kadafi Son

Liked this alot, keep up the good work