Life Goz On

[Kadafi Son]

Here's my 3rd poem. Read

I've been betrayed, and feelin' low recently/
Tried to be the good guy, at least at decency/
We've faced a lot of problems, but we still have more to go/
I wish to rest my soul and feel this agony and pain no more/
Just try and understand, I wanna clear this dust/
Misery is in my memory, I'm feelin like I'm about to bust/
My closest of kinz been known to try and hold me down/
So when I'm down and dirty, even my best friends won't hang around/
The only ones to care for me: My Family/
If somethin happenz to us now, well thats our tragedy/
Even the simplest things could make us feel better/
But shit gets worse, when going through more bills and eviction letters/
Wipe your tearz, and have some hope. Life will soon be smooth/
Like a homeless kid on the streets with something to prove/
He has faith, even though it "rains" everyday/
We gotta live, so we can take the time to truely play, when it's gray/
Dear Lord, give us the helping word
And the strength to let all my thoughts be heard/
We still strugglin, and I know I will never be alone/
My family: we must remember, that Life Goz On/

Peace

 

[assassin_4001]

wow,,,,niiiiiiiiice and deep shit man,,,i felt it,,i especially liked the part about the homeless kid,,,,u know we need more poems like this,,meaningfull poems,,,keep up the good work man,,,,and keep delivering

 

[Kadafi Son]

wow,,,,niiiiiiiiice and deep shit man,,,i felt it,,i especially liked the part about the homeless kid,,,,u know we need more poems like this,,meaningfull poems,,,keep up the good work man,,,,and keep delivering

Thanx a lot, bruh. That's probably the best feedback I ever got. I'll put a lot more poems on here soon. Peace

 

[The.Menace]

Well, again I like your rhymes and it flows good. I liked the msg in that other poem more, but guess that's just me&my mood.

 

[MATW95]

My closest of kinz been known to try and hold me down/
So when I'm down and dirty, even my best friends won't hang around/

But shit gets worse, when going through more bills and eviction letters/

Wipe your tearz, and have some hope. Life will soon be smooth/
Like a homeless kid on the streets with something to prove/

I like these lines alot because it would appeal to many people if they had the chance to read this.

He has faith, even though it "rains" everyday/

I like the allusion here :thumb:

 

[~live2tell~]

Nice, I liked the message and it was quite positive which I also liked. Good flow too.