lookin' back

[KJ1]

I think back on how easy adolescence was
never had pressure and didn;t understand love
blowing off class, drivin, gettin high in my car
get by with whatever cause youre a basketball star
those days will never return no matter how muchya plead
now we're looked on to lead and we're driven by greed
hard to imagine ten years ago that my future was bright
daddy said i wouldn't be shit, hope not to prove'em right

 

[KJ1]

would like some feedback to see if i should keep trying this stuff

 

[The.Menace]

and I'd love to see you followin the rules. closed until you do you replies and just for the record, it's 3 replies per poem posted. *so actually I should close another poem you posted but I'm in a good mood today, I'll reopen those 2 poems if you caught up with the replies, take care*

 

[The.Menace]

reopen and up

 

[DaRoYaLbRaT]

Hey. I thought the concept of the poem was good.. But the poem didnt feel finished @ the end, to me as the reader anyways - felt like there shouldve been more... But I felt wat u had to say. Keep it up!

pz

 

[Maverick]

would like some feedback to see if i should keep trying this stuff

understood your message in the poem.

and about the feedback, yeah give credit where its due, and you'll get responses, but dont let someones feedback decide whether or not you will continue to write. you obviously have thoughts that you feel should be shared, either on here or by yourself, so do what u want. i used to write alot, then i lost it. i dont know why but im sure ill get back at it someday.