Love

#1
i think i've posted this before, but i'm not sure, anyways, hope you like it, i didn't rhyme in this one.

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Love

I’ve seen it before.
Witnessing its protection and optimism
Until the end of all that is content
And soon it develops
into the opposite of what you wished
Proving wishes come true, yes
Only when reality is involved as well
I’ve seen its intoxication
Altering minds with guidelines of hope
Assuming time lines are not relevant
Which promotes the idea of no end
But as history has taught us
Endings are the beginnings of new endings
So reality is proven to be a myth of your mind
With beginnings teaching endings to end
And to continue no longer.
I’ve seen its hatred as well
Its ability to separate what was once joined
By interference from outside forces
Forces known as inconsistency in itself
As plans developed, they will unravel
In a way your plans had not foreseen
Losing your hope, yet hope not losing you
Which starts the cycle of searching
As you enter again.
As you leave again.
All over again.

I’ve seen it before.
 
#3
Poems don't have to rhyme, but you have to have a certain touch to it to pull it off. You did a nice job on this. Fresh vocabulary, nice message, and an overall good content.

Keep writing em man, because I really enjoyed this one.
 

Ivory$horty

†PoeticPrincess†
#4
You know what's funny...how such a talented poet/lyricist as yourself doesn't get the credit or feedback he deserves while others get more than they should. I haven't been around in a while but still I had to drop in and was more than glad that I peeped this.

I’ve seen its intoxication
Altering minds with guidelines of hope
Assuming time lines are not relevant
Which promotes the idea of no end
But as history has taught us
Endings are the beginnings of new endings
So reality is proven to be a myth of your mind


^^ This whole poem was dope but I really felt that part the most. Great to see you're still writing. Your work is always a pleasure to read.
Keep it up!

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~
 

k69atie

SicC's Love
#5
^^ not seen you on here for a while welcome back :)

back on topic, i really enjoyed reading this, keep up the good work :)
 
#7
Nice work. Well written piece. The climax was spot on which made the rest of it standout to me. Coz parts of it were hard to figure out. Blame the brain I have.

Keep it up
 
#10
bravo my man,,,especially the vocabs,,,,well written poem and good job,,,,i liked the part "ëndings are the biggening of new endings",,,anyhow my man keep up the good work.
 
#11
Hennessy said:
Love

I’ve seen it before.
Witnessing its protection and optimism
Until the end of all that is content
And soon it develops
into the opposite of what you wished

Proving wishes come true, yes
Only when reality is involved as well
I’ve seen its intoxication
Altering minds with guidelines of hope
Assuming time lines are not relevant
Which promotes the idea of no end

But as history has taught us
Endings are the beginnings of new endings
So reality is proven to be a myth of your mind
With beginnings teaching endings to end
And to continue no longer.
I’ve seen its hatred as well
Its ability to separate what was once joined
By interference from outside forces

Forces known as inconsistency in itself
As plans developed, they will unravel
In a way your plans had not foreseen
Losing your hope, yet hope not losing you
Which starts the cycle of searching

As you enter again.
As you leave again.
All over again.

I’ve seen it before.

yup henny you defo posted this before I remember dissecting it ;)

love it now as i did then, its very cynical though!! i love the expression in this and how you've found the ability to put that expression into words, you are a great writer thats for sure, i wanna see more from you though you hardly drop these days!

fave parts i have highlighted - hope you keep up the good work i'm sure you will
 

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