Me, Myself and I

[tHuG $TyLe]

Me MYself and I

Been all alone on my own got me hardheaded like al capone/
I took the throne, So I thank myself for my street poems/
I looked out for Me, I wanted to be Me even when i wasnt myself/
when i felt close to death and I was concerned with My health/
Took my last breath, Looked to the heavens to try and find Me/
Everyone got mad at I, but I always thought of myself kindly/
When I was defeated I looked inside me and tried to find myself/
dejected So headed to the right path but I had nothing left/
sitting on my deathbed looking at myself in the the mirror/
wishing to be me, hopeing that I could see more clearer/
all I got was misdilusioned prayers so we sat in unity/
in dark rooms, I was edgy got paranoid I didnt even trust me/
I was scared of myself, not knowing what would occur or happen/
I was left in a blur, picked up myself got the mic to start rappin/

...

closed doors it was Me clappin myself and at times got mad at I/
opposed adversiries could rip me..So fights broke out at night/
I got mad at Me, I was frustrated, I couldnt even look at myself/
I left the mic alone, it was left to me to write from within my chest/
Tried to please myself with dope writtens only to feel incomplete/
Myself wrote to the beat and left Me alone and into the streets/
So by myself, even fought away my pride so i got left is to write/
and thats not the crew either..Im by myself Until I let myself die/

 

[SiGh]

closed doors it was Me clappin myself and at times got mad at I/
opposed adversiries could rip me..So fights broke out at night/
I got mad at Me, I was frustrated, I couldnt even look at myself/

I took the throne, So I thank myself for my street poems/
I looked out for Me, I wanted to be Me even when i wasnt myself/
when i felt close to death and I was concerned with My health/

D O P E.
I told you b4 thuggie, i love the shit you write, and those lines are killers. And im not just saying this shit cuz u by boy, you really got talent. now put it to the MIC damn it.

 

[tHuG $TyLe]

^thanks Sigh..and i will.

 

[tHuG $TyLe]

Any more feed?

 

[struggle01]

good shit man. had some solid lines and i liked the way u ended the verse that was tight. Was feeling the content to the idea of fighting inside yourself had a message. keep it up yo

 

[tHuG $TyLe]

^thanks for the feed, just checked yours also.

 

[ImmortalTech]

Damn, I cant believe I missed this when it was first posted. But its definitely a dope ass peice. I mean for real, the rhymes are almost flawless and the concept is dope. keep spittin' man. Its weird how theres so many ppl out there than can write so dope yet we have some below average "This is why I'm Hot" type shit being drilled into our ears everyday.

~peace

 

[The.Menace]

A very good piece, I like it that it's so...precise...the length of the lines is the same, you rhyme every line and it just seems overall so well structured....good work.

If there'd be anything that I'd criticise, it would be the start. The very first line sets the tone, and you go in there with multipe rhymes alone/own/al capone/throne .... within basically one line. That is per se good, but the thing is, you don't keep that up through the piece (would be hard 2 do I know), the rest of the way you rhyme the last words, so I feel like....you set a tone early and can't keep it up, that's what I don't like about it.....but again, that's a detail, after I got over that lil 'disappointin' and looked at the rest of the verse, it's good, I like it. But I'd think about gettin rid of the multiple ryhmes in the first line just to have a unity all the way down til the end.

peace.

 

[Mr.Deuce]

D O P E N E S S.
deep, dope, DANG!!!!!!

 

[DaRoYaLbRaT]

Yo waddup dis is some tight work dude... Felt this, read nicely & You had some dope as lines uppin this..

I looked out for Me, I wanted to be Me even when i wasnt myself/
when i felt close to death and I was concerned with My health/
Took my last breath, Looked to the heavens to try and find Me/


Myself wrote to the beat and left Me alone and into the streets/
So by myself, even fought away my pride so i got left is to write/
and thats not the crew either..Im by myself Until I let myself die/


^^^Thats tight - felt wat chu was sayin... Dope piece, keep it up.

peace

 

[Kadafi Son]

I usually like everything you write, but I am not much of a fan of this particular. Its message was clear, but the way you worded it made it feel a bit sappy. Its format was cool but I feel like you could've done a lot better with the deliverance.

 

[Killuminatii 71]

That's dope. I'm gonna use your writtens over a beat...