Mirror, Mirror....

#1
replyed to 2 of Belo's and Ivory Shortie



Mirror, Mirror…. (2-22-05)

Verse 1:

Mirror, mirror what is my state of mind in glass/
Falling pass the waste lands of grand shine of sands/
I demand you tell me why she doesn’t think/
That me and her together can be the missing link/
To show dreams of us together in weather of her light/
So tightly connected her essence is better in my night/
But might this all be false paths, she hath drawn in for me/
Like deep marks in the sand that’s gone in the sea/
The dawn used to be she so tender, electric/
Respected in the valley of my heart, sent her the message/
That addressed the courtyard in red she said she concurs/
But words are so weak to speak so deep some verbs/
To her did not reach, these pretenses did not teach/
How deep affection seeps in the caverns of my sleep/
Now foul is my grief for the damned is now clearer/
How tears dry in the eyes of the man in this mirror/

Mirror, Mirror on the wall why do you cal with lies? /
My how much more hurt can you cause this guy/
Disguised under a veil that neither tells the truth/
It’s sad to think I am the one in jail over you/


Verse 2:

Mirror what did I do wrong come too strong or weak/
What is the portal to her dreams to make songs to breech/
The fortress of preference the precious will use/
I’m too dumb to realize my demise is reckless my cool/
Is of fools and wishing stars far out of reach not of sight/
Much like the girl I yearn for beneath the star light/
I assumed we could be tight with so much in common/
But the option of being friends ends with her, I’m sobbing/
Mirror, mirror I’m calling out what’s this about, this pain? /
That stains the souls windows with sprinkles that mounts with rain/
My dame has oust the flame I made in her silhouette/
For best times have dried staining my pillow wet/
When I met her, mirror, her beauty was far lifted and so precious/
I was blessed with the ability to see her stars gifted my soul let it/
Be poetic, artistic like her but my heart’s mistress did not see/
What these mirrors spoke profound, what she is to me/

Hook

Verse 3:

Do not be sad for me mirror for these tears were not so sharp/
The dark wraps like a scarf in parts that were her in my heart/
The sharks will eat my soul in cold cesspool of torture/
Odors of sleep's cousin bubbling as stress pulls the moisture/
Out her oyster eyes that hide the pearls of her existence/
The wicked spells that gel me to a girl who has next lifted/
Her image from my island my diamond is now buried/
I carry my emotions cross oceans shinning with a very/
Deceiving clarity in the mind false with a hope/
Moss has soaked with the frost that cause my pulse to be broke/
And froze with the idea that she is in another’s arms/
On sites her pictures drive me senseless, the lover harms/
It alarms me as shadows battle with stealth flights/
My main drag is knowing she’s holding someone else tight/
So my mirrors who are the listeners to blues which won’t atone/
I’m shown she’s the one always lonely and I’m the one always alone/

Sometimes I trip on how happy we could be….
 

Belo

New Member
#2
Wow now this was interesting... I loved these lines:
"The sharks will eat my soul in cold cesspool of torture/
Odors of sleep's cousin bubbling as stress pulls the moisture/
Out her oyster eyes that hide the pearls of her existence/
The wicked spells that gel me to a girl who has next lifted/"
They were my favourite but this was a great song.. have u recorded it? would love to hear it if you do
Tight rhymes man
Peace
 

Jurhum

Well-Known Member
#4
I really enjoyed the whole poem. Amazing imagery. I really enjoyed reading it. I'd also like to hear it if you do record it.
 
#7
You just keep writing them better and better huh? :)

Really enjoyed reading this Ghettostar, I loved the story, the flow, vocab was tight, everything just rings right when reading this.

The part that stood out the most to me was >>>

That addressed the courtyard in red she said she concurs/
But words are so weak to speak so deep some verbs/
To her did not reach, these pretenses did not teach/
How deep affection seeps in the caverns of my sleep/
Now foul is my grief for the damned is now clearer/
How tears dry in the eyes of the man in this mirror/


Great rhymes and word usage there, lyrical greatness, keep it up!
 
#8
xxsaraxx said:
You just keep writing them better and better huh? :)

Really enjoyed reading this Ghettostar, I loved the story, the flow, vocab was tight, everything just rings right when reading this.

The part that stood out the most to me was >>>

That addressed the courtyard in red she said she concurs/
But words are so weak to speak so deep some verbs/
To her did not reach, these pretenses did not teach/
How deep affection seeps in the caverns of my sleep/
Now foul is my grief for the damned is now clearer/
How tears dry in the eyes of the man in this mirror/


Great rhymes and word usage there, lyrical greatness, keep it up!

funny thing is that is based on actaul events so of course I had to make it do what it do baby. hahaha thanks again take it easy One'
 

Ivory$horty

†PoeticPrincess†
#11
Damn, you just always seem to outdo yourself don't ya?! . I really liked this piece from you. It was deep, it was well written, LOVED the vocabulary. It was...complex. And that's how I love my poetry.

Mirror, mirror I’m calling out what’s this about, this pain? /
That stains the souls windows with sprinkles that mounts with rain/
My dame has oust the flame I made in her silhouette/
For best times have dried staining my pillow wet/
When I met her, mirror, her beauty was far lifted and so precious/
I was blessed with the ability to see her stars gifted my soul let it/
Be poetic, artistic like her but my heart’s mistress did not see/
What these mirrors spoke profound, what she is to me/


^^ My fav part!
This was a beautiful drop.
Can't wait to read more :)

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~
 
#12
Ivory$horty said:
Damn, you just always seem to outdo yourself don't ya?! . I really liked this piece from you. It was deep, it was well written, LOVED the vocabulary. It was...complex. And that's how I love my poetry.

Mirror, mirror I’m calling out what’s this about, this pain? /
That stains the souls windows with sprinkles that mounts with rain/
My dame has oust the flame I made in her silhouette/
For best times have dried staining my pillow wet/
When I met her, mirror, her beauty was far lifted and so precious/
I was blessed with the ability to see her stars gifted my soul let it/
Be poetic, artistic like her but my heart’s mistress did not see/
What these mirrors spoke profound, what she is to me/


^^ My fav part!
This was a beautiful drop.
Can't wait to read more :)

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~

hahahaah thanks babe you aways make me smile!, read my other post my cleopatra.
 
#16
Pacaveli-T said:
damn a looker and a writer you are the whole pacakage arent you.....

hahahaha I Rap,sing, eat chickin and sip kool-aid, play Trumpet, write poetry/songs and Play B-ball . Im the modern defination of the Renaissance Negro. :thumb: ;)
 
#18
I told y'all I was goin to post the song when I did it, and y'all said I should so here it is might be 4 months later but here it is the lyrics were changed alot to match the flow of the song but all the instrumention is done live by two homies of I, of course I wrote and did vocals so here it is if y'all wanna peep it


Mirror, Mirror…. (2-22-05)

Verse 1:

Mirror, mirror what is my state of mind in glass/
Falling pass waste lands of shine of sands/
I demand you speak on why she doesn’t think/
That we as one could be the missing link/
To ink cashmere dreams the letter of her life/
Is so tight as her light’s better in my night/
Might this be false paths, she hath drawn for me/
Like deep steps in sands gone in seas/
She washed me with dawn that was electric/
Respected in the valley of my heart was her message/
To address our hopes so she then concurs/
But words are too weak to speak deep as verbs/
Can’t reach her soul so I shutter with fears/
Near the streets I sleep in the gutter of tears/
It appears she doesn’t care bout me clearer/
Tears dry inside eyes of the man in the mirror/

Hook:

How do you feel? About/
About Me/
How do you? /
How do you feel? About/
About Me/
Do you care? Do you care? /
About/


Verse 2:

Mirror what did I do wrong come too strong or weak/
What is the portal for these songs to breech/
These fortresses the precious will use/
I’m too dumb to realize I’m reckless my cool/
Is fueled by wishing stars far out of reach not sight/
Like the girl I yearn for beneath star light/
I assumed we’d be tight with so much in common/
But the options ends our trust, I’m sobbing/
Mirror, mirror I’m calling out what’s this about, this pain? /
That stains the soul’s windows that mounts with rain/
My dame oust the flame made in her silhouette/
As better times have dried staining my pillow wet/
When we met, mirror, she was digging the message/
Her presence was lifted but the soul let it/
Be poetic as my heart’s mistress did not see/
What this mirror spoke profound, what she is to me/

Hook

Verse 3:

My thoughts are suicide notes I wrote for despair/
Is there any hope for life is not fair/
I dare have spoken these death threats/
Against the figure in my mirror who wept sweat/
I guess it was all lies all the times she said hi/
Fed lies of the dark side like a Jedi/
Red eyes burn with embers as I remember her face/
Her shape, why did she change it hurts me great/
This state can’t be her how could she flip a switch/
And change for the worst so awfully quick/
She plead the fifth to evidence that lies/
On sites where her pictures reside/
To drive, the shadows to unravel stealth flights/
My main drag knowing she holding someone else tight/
So mirror my listener to blues I can’t atone/
She’s the one always lonely but I’m the one always alone/





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