money

[radkin]

Money is the biggest evil, man has to face today
It causes wars, fights and whores
And even slavery
It eats away at peoples souls, making them lust after which they don’t have
If money was a man we’d say that he was mad
It causes teenage mothers to struggle to get by
It causes governments to be corrupted, evil and to lie
It’ll make you suddenly have new friends and your old ones to disappear
It’ll make your sight to become blurred
When once it was clear
So I say to money, leave my life alone
I really do not need you, I can get by on my own!!!!

 

[kman_69]

cool peice man...nice flow..lol im with you FUCK MONEY!...but im kinda hungry...so i guess i need it

dope drop, keep it up

 

[~live2tell~]

Money is the biggest evil, man has to face today
It causes wars, fights and whores
And even slavery
It eats away at peoples souls, making them lust after which they don’t have
If money was a man we’d say that he was mad
It causes teenage mothers to struggle to get by
It causes governments to be corrupted, evil and to lie
It’ll make you suddenly have new friends and your old ones to disappear
It’ll make your sight to become blurred
When once it was clear
So I say to money, leave my life alone
I really do not need you, I can get by on my own!!!!

Great message written well, clear to understand and good to read.

 

[fisherM.A.N.]

"Money is the biggest evil, man has to face today".. true indeed, but a necessary evil.. perhaps it is more accurate to say that the lust for money is the biggest evil.. sad fact is that too many people are so fixated on money that they neglect all else in favor of accumulating more "wealth" than they actually need.. to say "wealth" and "riches" are synonmous with having money is erroneous, though the concepts are commonly used interchangeably.. once asked to my father 'who is the richest man in the world?' expecting him to guess bill gates, my father asserted that he was the richest man in the world, counting all of his blessings (wife, health, children, etc) as his "wealth".. we can all be "rich" once we understand what real riches are..

"I really do not need you, I can get by on my own!!!!".. i wish that were true.. but in this society, a man's worth is determined by the numbers in his bank account, not integrity of character..

i liked ur piece because of the message.. as u can see, it made me think.. keep working with these kinds of ideas and expand ur vocab and smooth out the flow a little bit.. good job

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