nothing but poetry

[The.Menace]

nothing but poetry

What could make me happy but poetry?
Going through my history it feels like destiny
to make my name famous - at least I try
cause then my kind might never die
What could free me but poetry?
It helps me 2 be as well as 2 flee from reality
and it might even offer a chance 2 advance
like givin me a helpin hand, understand
nothing could make me happy but poetry
cause it helps 2 see a reason 2 be in this misery


-

 

[Devious]

Ahh, you did post it menace. Good stuff, i like it a lot

 

[Kaos88]

yeh i really like this...short but very effective. really liked these lines:

Going through my history it feels like destiny
to make my name famous - at least I try
cause then my kind might never die

nice piece menace
peace xXx

 

[XIAN]

like givin me a helpin hand, understand
nothing could make me happy but poetry
cause it helps 2 see a reason 2 be in this misery

I can relate to this, and I recently wrote a poem called "What If We All Talked in Poetry" and it's about how poems are poems because they are poetic, and how life could be if we talked the way we write.

Anyway your's is more of a personal poem, and it's great, especially the last line.

~peace~

 

[Synful*Luv]

Love it, short, sweet, deep, and to the point :thumb:

 

[kman_69]

i love the theme to this one.....infact, i think u have inspired me to write something! hehe

only critisism is the rhyme scheme, none of the "ly" words seem to really fit with "poetry"....maybe its just me tho

keep it up!

peace.

 

[The.Menace]

Hm, I don't really feel your critisim kman, but maybe it's just me. Anyway thanks for peeping, same goes for Xian, Syn, Kaos and Devious - thx for readin, I'm glad at least some feel this piece.

 

[The.Menace]

uppin cause I want more feedback,

 

[Kadafi Son]

I like this. It's short but it's str8 2 tha point. I feel like that as well. But keep it comin'...

Peace

 

[The.Menace]

Thx for the feedback

 

[~live2tell~]

long time no talk i know, its good to see you posting your poems on here, it's about time! i totally understand what you wrote here in this poem and its deep, i feel it's something beyond expression. keep writing, i know you will anyway

 

[The.Menace]

Thx for the feedback girl and yeah you don't need 2 tell me 2 keep writing.

Something beyond expression? LoL, aiight.

 

[~live2tell~]

Thx for the feedback girl and yeah you don't need 2 tell me 2 keep writing.

Something beyond expression? LoL, aiight.

Crikey I try and give you a compliment and everything...

What I mean is it kinda spoke to me somehow

 

[The.Menace]

How could I not speak 2 you girl? And yes I saw it as a compliment anyway.

One Love.

 

[~live2tell~]

grrrml... you know what I'm trying to say!

p.s. shut up now

 

[LilProphet]

good stuff homie, like it a lot

 

[kimbo_thug]

ya always find people sayin about other peoples poems
"it could have been longer" or shit like that
this poem shows that ya work dont have to be long to be good
quality not quantity people

oh n Xian is that poem u were talkin bout posted id really like to read it ??
xx

 

[Helena]

"nothing could make me happy but poetry
cause it helps 2 see a reason 2 be in this misery"
my favourite part!

 

[AmerikazMost]

It sounds nice, but to be honest, it's nothing special. You intermix too many superficial wants (i.e. fame, chance 2 advance) with your intellectual desires.

I like the last line, and I like the concept, but I think you could've gone about it better.

Just my opinion.

 

[The.Menace]

Thx anyone that replied.

Amerikaz: I never felt like this was one of my best pieces or something, the reason why I posted it was to show anyone how much I love that shit - I agree with you, I consider this myself average but not one of my best or something.