Peep This* Freestyle by Mus G

[musg7]

Ayo ma words hittin niggas in dey vein/
like they did cokaine/
ma whole affirmation/
killin niggas like assination.
When i put ma wax in/
i shine like vaseline.
Blow u up with petrolium/
Ruling shit like neapolian.
Oh did i mention ma name yo/
go by MUS G yo/
hit mo balls than polo/
and when it comes to beef I'm solo/
U dun know.
This is jus ma essential/
I run u down like a pedestrian.
I send niggas biscuits/
and it aint dog treats/
its the metal carryin bullets bringin hear in the streets.
These ignorant fuckas really cant understand
the reason
why they be blowin themselves up
in Iraq and Afghanistan

Cant...think more

reply wit comments

 

[CalcuoCuchicheo]

You need to reply to 2 other threads before you post your own work.

 

[ImmortalTech]

hmm, it was aiyte, some lines didnt even rhyme right, but that happens when u freestyle sometimes, but how exactly do u type up a freestyle???... if ur gonna write, u might as well take an extra 5 minutes to fix up ur lines, make ur lines thicker ... for exaple:

Ayo pay attention and listen to my words cuz they hittin niggas in their vein/
run through ya system like a fiend sniffin cocaine/

<-- i pretty much said the same thing as u did in ya first 2 lines, u decide what sounds better.. btw where ya from in t-dot?

ps. like Calcuo said, u need to drop feedback to get looks

 

[musg7]

Respect..people
am from Mississauga, toronto..still
i jus moved from NY queens like 2 yrs back...
aiight ez

 

[musg7]

Respect..people..thanks for the advice immortaltech
am from Mississauga, toronto..still
i jus moved from NY queens like 2 yrs back...
aiight ez

 

[Tha Thug Poet]

not the most complex rhymin but it was aight...

let me break it down

Ayo ma words hittin niggas in dey vein/
like they did cokaine/

this was alright...not to hard hitting but atleast u got some sort of concept going on

ma whole affirmation/
killin niggas like assination.

shouldnt rhyme these toghter like this

When i put ma wax in/
i shine like vaseline.
Blow u up with petrolium/
Ruling shit like neapolian.

nice play but u need to come harder

Oh did i mention ma name yo/
go by MUS G yo/

come on dogg

hit mo balls than polo/<---makes u sound gay so delete it

and when it comes to beef I'm solo/
U dun know.

dont rhyme this basic

This is jus ma essential/
I run u down like a pedestrian.
I send niggas biscuits/
and it aint dog treats/
its the metal carryin bullets bringin hear in the streets.
These ignorant fuckas really cant understand
the reason
why they be blowin themselves up
in Iraq and Afghanistan

the rest doenst even rhyme...

look like ur mind was goin faster than u could get it out

spend alil more time elevation ya vocab and learin format and then you gonna get some where all in all this wasnt the worst so keep it up and keep improvin

 

[CalcuoCuchicheo]

Can people stop replying to this until the kid replies to 2 other threads?

Cheers.