Rose W/Out thorns (poem)

[Ridin 4 Pac]

Rose W/No thorns (poem)

Wassup yall, I wrote this poem a while ago, let me first say that Im in no way a "poet" not to sound modest or anything liek that, but personally I know that deep down I suck at poetry, but for some reason (well, I know the reason) latley I've just been writing stuff down and I wanted to share it....

A Rose With No Thorns

A rose with no thorns
How could that be?
Something so beautiful and good
That wont prick me?
I didn’t think it was possible
But you made me believe
That a rose with no thorns
Could change my life completely
I didn’t know what to do
How to treat a rose like you
I said things I didn’t mean
Because I never knew
That even in this beautiful rose
A thorn would eventually come through
The thorn got me in the heart.
I was scared…
Not knowing what to do
The rose is gone now
And my heart is too
Because I know in all my life
I’ll never find another rose like you

 

[tHuG $TyLe]

Yeaa good poem

but it should be in poetic justice.

 

[Ridin 4 Pac]

my bad, i figured since it kinda had to do with love....

 

[Ridin 4 Pac]

I never visit poetic justice, but I saw that xXHizzo.M40Xx made a similar poem to mine, and like me, he got his inspiration from "the rose that grew from concrete" I just want it to be said that, I never saw his poem until now, just so no one starts makin shit up that im stealing work

 

[~live2tell~]

Wassup yall, I wrote this poem a while ago, let me first say that Im in no way a "poet" not to sound modest or anything liek that, but personally I know that deep down I suck at poetry, but for some reason (well, I know the reason) latley I've just been writing stuff down and I wanted to share it....

A Rose With No Thorns

A rose with no thorns
How could that be?
Something so beautiful and good
That wont prick me?
I didn’t think it was possible
But you made me believe
That a rose with no thorns
Could change my life completely
I didn’t know what to do
How to treat a rose like you
I said things I didn’t mean
Because I never knew
That even in this beautiful rose
A thorn would eventually come through
The thorn got me in the heart.
I was scared…
Not knowing what to do
The rose is gone now
And my heart is too
Because I know in all my life
I’ll never find another rose like you

I enjoyed reading this, you portrayed your message really well without making it complicated. Hope you keep writing. I highlighted my fave parts.

 

[Ridin 4 Pac]

thank you^^

I dont write complicated poetry, wish I could....I like to keep it simple, I try to emulate Langston Hughes' in that his poems can be short and simple, while still telling a story

 

[xXHizzo.M40Xx]

man this poem is good shit... im likin it, ur not at all ripin my shit off... im feelin this... i am no poet either but when i write (rarely ever) i usually have to listen to some kinda deep shit, like keep ya head up, or baby dont cry etc...

 

[~live2tell~]

thank you^^

I dont write complicated poetry, wish I could....I like to keep it simple, I try to emulate Langston Hughes' in that his poems can be short and simple, while still telling a story

I tend to keep my poety simple too, less is more in some cases remember

 

[Belo]

That was cool hey... flowed well over the music I have on, and nice concept of the thorns...
Good 2 see a new face in here... post some more
Peace
Belo

 

[Buck_Buck_Bing]

brill work, keep it up

 

[TG1 Ghetto One]

that was deep props keep up da good work

 

[Jurhum]

real nice. i enjoyed it.

 

[MX Red]

heartbreaking man, though it was gonna be a nice poem, its sad......but an awfully good poem!

 

[Ivory$horty]

A rose with no thorns
How could that be?
Something so beautiful and good
That wont prick me?
I didn’t think it was possible
But you made me believe
That a rose with no thorns
Could change my life completely

^^ Damn, I can relate to that. Expresses my feelings right now for the special someone in my life. I thought this was a nice, simple poem. Not too complex yet meaningful. I like how you wrote it.
Keep putting your thoughts down...

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[Ridin 4 Pac]

thanks for the comments everyone, I wrote this for my ex who I still love but cant be with, her b-day is coming up and even though I dont have to get her anything because of our situation right now, I was thinking of re-writing this poem for her and getting a rose to go with it, I'm gonna cut the thorns off the rose I get

 

[kman_69]

holy shit, that was dope!

mad metephore use....really feelin this...


i liked the ending too...even tho i knew it'd be about someone...it was still cool


keep it up