Sister Cities

#1
maybe this will give you an overview so you can relate:

Vanessa, I don't know why all of a sudden your acting suprised that I have some feelings for you that extneds pass friendship. You have known this since day one, but to be fair I knew that you weren't entirely feeling me like that so I never made too much of an effort to try and convince you otherwise. Everytime we have met in person or talked on the phone I have been respectful. Never have I said anything to the point of wanting to "get at you" as you put it. I care for you more then you'll ever know, but the sad thing is I have started to realize that you might never know. Truth be told, I am not happy about you getting back together with Airis after all you have told me about what has happened. Love's has it's ups and downs, yes, but there are certain things that someone who proclaims to love should not do as he has done with you. If everything you told me about what down in the past 2+ years if accurate, then he is undeserving of your time, affection and love. The thing that makes me even more upset is the fact that you give him more the benifit of the doubt then the one who has never done wrong to you, if anything, has shown love to you since 01'. If this is not enough to solidfy a postion as someone who is close to you, in any way, then that is on you. IF there is knowledge, advice, wisedom I can give you it is this: the choices we make define our reality, our meaning of life is based on choices, nothing else. The one you choose will determine your life. The decision to let someone who you said made you "so depressed that you dropped to 95lbs and was sucidal" back into your life as more then a friend is something I do not understand, I will never understand it no matter how many girls I know have this happen, for you are not the first.

If you feel more uneasy about me wanting to be closer to you in a manner of being you boyfriend, which I wouldn't mind but know will never happen as long as you look through the world through fogged windows, the someone who hurt you deeply then that speaks louder then any non phone call or whatever. I am here for you, but I can always say and do so much.

My hope is you do not take this in anger or whatever, if you dont know me and my ways by now then you never will, my hope is to be real with you. If he had just got in a petty argument over some insignificant junk then I wouldnt be dropping these lines like this, but after all it was you who told me all that went down. I guess even though I might match alot of what you list as your criteria, he has something I don't that overshadows any shortcomings.


This verse of 3 is about a girl I held dear, although written before all thsi mess happen between us (happened in June wrote this in Jan.) its pretty crazy how much the song I wrote back then for her has taken on the script that I thought. She has since went back to Ares and broken my heart once more, but see I realzied that a dream is no longer a dream once i beocme reality, for dreams are to escape the hardships of reality. Dreams are limited only by one's self and not society as reality is. Thus, a dream girl can nevber trully come to fluertion since she is a dream, never to be perfected or molded in the form you want in reality. This is just a combintion of what I said and me coming to the realiziation that only way I'll ever see her and me togtehr is to etrenally dream. Enjoy this, I hope you will:thumb:



replyed to Artisic Girl, Devious and MATW


Sister Cities (Inspired by Vanessa) (1-26-06)

Verse 1:

What’s my line darling as I read her script/
I tripped off the quick wit she bled and spit/
Kept with the Titan remember flying at stars pace/
As insomnia will break my scared face/
Of basic instincts of how everyday/
The taste of chocolate inside her blinding ray/
Stay tuned to scenes of dreams deferred/
The girl who blows me away she’s seen superb/
That’s occurred above the rim the flyest picture/
Quicker poetic justice in diamond scriptures/
I give her juice from Eden’s blues lagoons/
Zoomed to moons Apollo’s 13 rouge doubloons/
Bloom bright like moon light of gigantic/
Magic loves that drugs and sunk titanic/
Granted her life’s like a movie reel/
Peep her tragedy that’s agony to beauty still/

Hook (2x):

Hold on stay let hope take you/
To a place few balloons have ever been to/
Follow me to a place where our souls/
Can imagine love that can unfold/



Verse 2:

Royal’s the color purple but it hurts in her eyes/
As I try to revive her soul her ghost hides/
My how skies bled blue as it rained outside/
I swore the rain was the tears from cupid’s eyes/
Her fear of false love blind to the facts/
That realties wrong dreams are for real but that/
Doesn’t matter for she stays in hope’s gridlock/
Rocked by comets of despair she been caught/
And haunted by passion hooked she hears his screams/
Dreams want silence but the lambs fear and seem/
To be at peace she lost like her weight becoming thinner/
I’d give her my all but she falls loving sinners/
Dimmer the lights in her eyes once the stars to guide/
But she lies inside secret gardens tarred and dried/
As she cried I wish I was the one she’d smile/
But that’s fantasy like purple raining on a rose of Cairo/

Verse 3:

Aphrodite nightly wants her Ares but he's not the same/
Loves wars of pain, more then adoring dame/
But in my brain I wonder why I’m also dying inside/
Not sure why but I'm realizing in my mind, why/
I consider her my dream girl, since/
It's only in sleep where we seem perfect/
Makes sense, since a dream's to escape reality/
So the tragedy is that we can never be/
Sadly all I do in life will never be enough/
To touch her soul this whole pill will bring me luck/
To never wake up from the Matrix state surreal/
Still and blue is a Dr. Who takes more pills/
To feel her love so real but awake/
We create reality we use dreams to escape/
So I can’t wait to visit Death's Sister City, seems/
My dream girl only way will ever be...is in my dreams/
 
#3
Verse 1 and 2 I didnt feel was neccesary this was the most important part (Im tyring to keep the post I do here short and on point so more people will repson although this place is always empty)unless you want to peep it
 

ArtsyGirl

Well-Known Member
#4
I loved how you finished that off with:
To feel her love so real but awake/
We create reality we use dreams to escape/
So I can’t wait to visit Death's Sister City, seems/
My dream girl only way will ever be...is in my dreams/
Its just complicated enough to give it depth, but flows nicely aswell so it doesnt put the reader of. Well for me atleast. Well done on this verse, you should post up the rest so those who want to read it (me) can :D
 
#5
artisticgurl said:
I loved how you finished that off with:


Its just complicated enough to give it depth, but flows nicely aswell so it doesnt put the reader of. Well for me atleast. Well done on this verse, you should post up the rest so those who want to read it (me) can :D


hahahaha well guess people dont care bout lengths then but I will post it up soon then (dont have it on me right now) but yea thanks for seeing what I was trying to do with hahaha;) much love as always.







Edit: Just was able to wirte it from memory hahaha so check my orginal first post I got it there:thumb:
 

ArtsyGirl

Well-Known Member
#6
Those are equally as great, this line caught my eye; I’d give her my all but she falls loving sinners And this sounded familiar I swore the rain was the tears from cupid’s eyes ;) hehe Good stuff.
 
#9
artisticgurl said:
Those are equally as great, this line caught my eye; I’d give her my all but she falls loving sinners And this sounded familiar I swore the rain was the tears from cupid’s eyes ;) hehe Good stuff.

Yes had also the "reality wrong, dreams are for real" part :)
 
#10
"I swore the rain was the tears from cupid’s eyes"
Great use of imagery here, I can picture this quite literally :thumb:

"Not sure why but I'm realizing in my mind, why
I consider her my dream girl, since
It's only in sleep where we seem perfect
Makes sense, since a dream's to escape reality
So the tragedy is that we can never be"

This last chunk hits close to home with me man and I really feel it.

Tell you the truth though, I didn't really enjoy the movie references in the first verse though, it just seemed to take away from the poem's overall message you know? Keep it up though, you've got the right skills to put out solid work.
 

Kadafi Son

Well-Known Member
#11
Yeah, I agree with MATW95.

The way u put the 3rd verse down was better than tha 1st or 2nd, but in overall, great lyrics.

P.S. I was feelin' Vanessa's Letter. I can relate
 
#12
Well I do rap this;thus, the movie references....however I do not believe that it takes away from it, espically if you understand what I mean by comparing my realtionship with her to that of a movie....thank you both for the great feedback though bout damn time I got some.
 
#13
Damn I love your writing style, its so unique, you really put your mark on things huh. I really like how you make your words so visual, it really makes your work a pleasure to read. Keep writing.
 

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