Someone once told me

[~live2tell~]

I wrote this poem about 4 months ago, I seem to be reading it alot lately though and so thought I would share with you, feedback is appreciated as always guys (and girls).


Someone once told me

Speak your heart not your mind
Someone once told me
For it’s within your heart you’ll find
The key to your destiny
It’s difficult to speak your heart
When it’s covered in a cloud
Blocking truth, tearing us apart
As you speak your mind out loud

Some things are better left unsaid
Someone once told me
Don’t keep it inside, share instead
Everything, make them see
Within me lies acceptance
Although you’re sure to question it
Easily consumed with annoyance
I still want to know all of you, every bit

You don’t always see with your eyes open
Someone once told me
Succumb to the darkness, close them
What will be will be
I can still be with you
From the first break of daylight
In your heart, each minute new
Remaining as day becomes night

Don’t ever be afraid to love
Someone once told me
For love will lift you high above
Forthcoming obstacles and difficulty
Sometimes it will be hard to love
No one said it would be easy
The greatness often makes it enough
And time will tell, we’ll see

Please stay as you are
Someone once told me
Constant as a shining star
Full of light, understanding and possibility
Your eyes twinkle as that star
Staring directly into my soul
Unfaltering, no matter how near or far
You complete me, making me whole.

Listen to your own wisdom
Is all I ask of you
Inside yourself resides freedom
And a beautiful honesty, so true
I know your heart is full of pain
Each day producing a new blow
The path facing you seems like a lonely lane
Still, live your life; please… this is your show

 

[Sebastian]

i do not have a favorite line but i like the concept (how do u say it? concept? rough draft?lol...im not sure but i think u know what i mean) of the poem.....so :thumb:

 

[Belo]

I liked that a lot too... the idea of repeating the someone once told me bit.. that was really good hey
Reminded me of all the sayings and cliches we have
Nice poem full of wisdom it was really good hey. I enjoyed reading it a lot
Keep it up
Peace

 

[GhettoStar]

I wrote this poem about 4 months ago, I seem to be reading it alot lately though and so thought I would share with you, feedback is appreciated as always guys (and girls).


Someone once told me

Speak your heart not your mind
Someone once told me
For it’s within your heart you’ll find
The key to your destiny
It’s difficult to speak your heart
When it’s covered in a cloud
Blocking truth, tearing us apart
As you speak your mind out loud

Some things are better left unsaid
Someone once told me
Don’t keep it inside, share instead
Everything, make them see
Within me lies acceptance
Although you’re sure to question it
Easily consumed with annoyance
I still want to know all of you, every bit

You don’t always see with your eyes open
Someone once told me
Succumb to the darkness, close them
What will be will be
I can still be with you
From the first break of daylight
In your heart, each minute new
Remaining as day becomes night

Don’t ever be afraid to love
Someone once told me
For love will lift you high above
Forthcoming obstacles and difficulty
Sometimes it will be hard to love
No one said it would be easy
The greatness often makes it enough
And time will tell, we’ll see

Please stay as you are
Someone once told me
Constant as a shining star
Full of light, understanding and possibility
Your eyes twinkle as that star
Staring directly into my soul
Unfaltering, no matter how near or far
You complete me, making me whole.

Listen to your own wisdom
Is all I ask of you
Inside yourself resides freedom
And a beautiful honesty, so true
I know your heart is full of pain
Each day producing a new blow
The path facing you seems like a lonely lane
Still, live your life; please… this is your show

Im feeling this drop because this is a very influential piece of writing telling the person you wrote it for or us to almost keep are head up towards the stars above. I love the part about love because in todays lifestyle it seems loike we are afraid to love and even open up to people at all but this writting you prove that its alright to open up every once and awhile. Your soul pentrates thorugh this writing whihc makes this one o9f the truest words indeed, the anlogies, similes and metphors are outstanding espcially when talking bout the stars. Keep it real indeed you did good with this indeed.

 

[Jurhum]

amazing ... i loved the ending... not to take away from the rest of the poem cuz it all was beautiful.

 

[kman_69]

cool, drop...def feelin the format..

Please stay as you are
Someone once told me
Constant as a shining star
Full of light, understanding and possibility
Your eyes twinkle as that star
Staring directly into my soul
Unfaltering, no matter how near or far
You complete me, making me whole.

^^fav part....this peice definetly spoke 2 me!

keep em commin

peace!

 

[~live2tell~]

i do not have a favorite line but i like the concept (how do u say it? concept? rough draft?lol...im not sure but i think u know what i mean) of the poem.....so :thumb:

Thx for checking it glad you appreciated the concept, ta for the thumbs up

I liked that a lot too... the idea of repeating the someone once told me bit.. that was really good hey
Reminded me of all the sayings and cliches we have
Nice poem full of wisdom it was really good hey. I enjoyed reading it a lot
Keep it up
Peace

Glad you enjoyed this one Belo, its kinda inspirational to me, so its defo a good thing that you think its full of wisdom
Appreciate you taking the time to read and post your feedback, thx.

Im feeling this drop because this is a very influential piece of writing telling the person you wrote it for or us to almost keep are head up towards the stars above. I love the part about love because in todays lifestyle it seems loike we are afraid to love and even open up to people at all but this writting you prove that its alright to open up every once and awhile. Your soul pentrates thorugh this writing whihc makes this one o9f the truest words indeed, the anlogies, similes and metphors are outstanding espcially when talking bout the stars. Keep it real indeed you did good with this indeed.

I'm glad you read this Ghettostar as you seem to have taken the true meaning of this poem and understood it for what it is. Thanks for taking the time out to respond, truly appreciate it.

amazing ... i loved the ending... not to take away from the rest of the poem cuz it all was beautiful.

wow... thx I'm glad you thought so Thanks for even peeping this and posting feedback, real kind of you.

cool, drop...def feelin the format..

Please stay as you are
Someone once told me
Constant as a shining star
Full of light, understanding and possibility
Your eyes twinkle as that star
Staring directly into my soul
Unfaltering, no matter how near or far
You complete me, making me whole.

^^fav part....this peice definetly spoke 2 me!

keep em commin

peace!

Thx kman, glad you took a fave part away with you. Appreciate your comments, thank you!

 

[radkin]

I like the way you've used actaul sayings, made it easy to relate to it and I also really like the message in the final parragraph :thumb:

 

[Blunted Dreamz]

I was inspired and moved. Every bit was so true and important for each of us to know and remember, especially when we feel that we are alone on that painful path. I get the feeling that you wrote this for someone in particular. If you did I really hope you shared this with them, I honestly think that it could be the light that helps them find their inner peace again.

 

[~live2tell~]

I was inspired and moved. Every bit was so true and important for each of us to know and remember, especially when we feel that we are alone on that painful path. I get the feeling that you wrote this for someone in particular. If you did I really hope you shared this with them, I honestly think that it could be the light that helps them find their inner peace again.

Its inspirational to me too so I'm really pleased you could feel that too.

I shared this with the person it was aimed at... although I'm not sure it helped him any.

Thank you for taking the time to read and post your comments, its very much appreciated.