and you actually messed up the syllables in the rhyming multi and added an extra syllable to the set up.
Hoes-i've-played
Son-ya-Blade
as to your
Hoes-that-i've-played
Son-ya-blade
that's the exact same line minus the periods in the punchline, and the extra 'that' added in your set up.
periods are often added to create misdirection in text punchlines
it's all based on pronunciation, but to me this is a slant rhyme based off of my vocabulary. to others it may not rhyme at all, but the stresses are the same.
and there's no doubt that musically this would be off, as would the majority of text verses online.
Yeah, I know where you were going for it, but you just needed an extra syllable in the first line for it to actually work as a bar. It's a good line though.
But like I said if you want an independent judge to make sure people arent over cramming syllable into their bars let me know, otherwise just get them to record it over a beat to prove it
Actually to keep it fair, Im not sure if this is done or not in other battles, but how about you provide each round with a beat to write to, so that both contestants uses the same bpm and bars are the same length? Might be an idea? Not trying to step on your toes, I just want this competition to be fair and respectable.