Stuck Sad

[XIAN]

[I wrote this poem on May 30, 2005. I went through what I would call a severe depression earlier this year when I wrote this and I was just looking back and thought I'd post it. I just named it now. Thanks.]


eventually thoughts get turned into tears
or the sad regret of lost years
or the feeling of being pointless
that brings us these fears

And the anger of a man so selfish so consumed
by money that he can't see that my future is doom
and my heart is getting dark and cold
forcing me to have to choose

And the girl that leaves my side flys
by the side of friends' exciting lives
and my heart is feeling so in love
but depressing from her happy eyes

And the inadequate boy growing up all alone
looks to these TV shows to give him a home
and my heart is hurting from all I missed
wishing I had let them go

And the god I trusted for so long so strong
looks at me sadly and my faith is gone
and my heart is bleeding from deep loneliness
hoping the pain won't last so long.

 

[nabila]

i love this poem .. its so strong. The poem took me back to some of the sad times i went thru.

 

[Cown]

Simple poem, but it has a lot of heart in it. Writting ones feelings down isnt always easy but I think you did a great job, keep it up.

 

[kman_69]

i relate to this peice heaps man!

And the girl that leaves my side flys
by the side of friends' exciting lives
and my heart is feeling so in love
but depressing from her happy eyes

^^especially this part...

nice drop man...hope ya feelin betta!

peace

 

[Ivory$horty]

Simple poem, but it has a lot of heart in it. Writting ones feelings down isnt always easy but I think you did a great job, keep it up.

Couldn't have said it better myself. Reading this poem brought back a lot of memories, mainly unhappy ones. I've come a long way since those days though, like I'm sure you have too. Great writing...very deep. I felt every single line cos I can relate to those feelings you expressed. Thanks for sharing this.

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[jm5471]

And the inadequate boy growing up all alone
looks to these TV shows to give him a home
and my heart is hurting from all I missed
wishing I had let them go

And the god I trusted for so long so strong
looks at me sadly and my faith is gone
and my heart is bleeding from deep loneliness
hoping the pain won't last so long.

great piece i loved how u ended it in and hope that the depression state is over i went through a bad one also a few years back and it sucks but when you look back on it you see that your a stronger person now then back then, keep ya head up

 

[Jokerman]

Really good. Lines that will be burned in my memory.

 

[Kaos88]

this is a really good piece...i went thru some shit last year and for the start of this year so yeh i can really relate to some parts. i really liked these lines:

And the god I trusted for so long so strong
looks at me sadly and my faith is gone
and my heart is bleeding from deep loneliness
hoping the pain won't last so long.

good work xian

 

[The.Menace]

Oh this piece is tight. I loved how u used "and" every other line - it really gives the reader the impression of an endless struggle, you know what I mean - it never stops, you add something more every other line - I like the idea and I think it worked out quite well.

pz

 

[M4cKaVe71]

Simple poem, but it has a lot of heart in it. Writting ones feelings down isnt always easy but I think you did a great job, keep it up.

exactly. its a mood that lasts for a moment, but (fortunatelly) doesnt last forever, and its hard to break words down when you're all into that mind state.

very emotional poem.

 

[KJ13]

dag....this poen is good...you explained your emotions and feelings so well. not a lot of people can do that. its strong all the way to the end.

 

[True Thugz]

Poem is sick! Depression spot on. You wrote that really well. I was like that for a while back in the day so indeed I could relate.

Whole piece is dope to me :thumb:

Keep it up.

 

[Kadafi Son]

This is a real real real nice (and sad) poem Xian. Like the other person said, I like it because it was from the heart and mines to. I'm lookin forward to seein' more

Peace...

 

[~live2tell~]

Really liked this because it was simple and easy for me to relate to, I felt like you said so much in only a few verses. Nice piece, really nice piece