Tears of an Angel

[jm5471]

this poem i wrote thinking about my mom, shes been through more than anyone else i know and shes is able to still keep going, she lost my dad to brain cancer (died at age 40 in 1999 which FUCKING SUCKS) and my brother at age 17 was in a terrible car accident in 2002 which left him handicapped and shit dont really wanna get into it and im a fucking mess still from it but she can still pull through it all so just a lil info behind this piece, let me know what you think


ive seen many nights an angel cry
over life death and how she feels inside
creating puddles of troubles long held inside
tho she manages to keep her head held up high
altho at times she can break
i guess a way to escape the fate
thats hers til the pearly gates
this worldly place can make
even the strongest crack and beak
but takes on the task
and creates a world
w/o cracks but great
putting others over herself in any situation
but never over her other self and thats why shes pacing
embracing the youth and the elder
always speaking truth and providing shelter
all the proofs there, so except her instead of me
i know that ill be scared, but the proofs there, dont make me plead
but still please i do believe that she will walk up those stairs
the tears of an angel are full of dispair..........does anyone care????



i will probably keep adding onto it but this is just off the top of my head so if i add on ill make a new thread

 

[ArtsyGirl]

No criticism for this, I feel poems that go that personal cant be. I'd say though you should show her this, or when you are happy with it completely because I'm pretty sure she'd be proud to know how you feel about her and the strength she shows.

 

[jm5471]

thanks for taking the time to check it out and ill end up showing it to her when i complete it

 

[Kadafi Son]

Ya first comment and then ya poem kinda touched me. I feel for you. Looks like u went thru some shit. Sometimes, when I'm down, I'll write a poem and I can sorta put my past behind me and I can subside tha pain 4 a while. If u wanna, I'd advised that ti=o help get over things, just start pouring your heart out on paper and maybe you'll feel better afterwards...maybe...take it easy...

peace

 

[Ivory$horty]

creating puddles of troubles long held inside

I loved that line and I will agree with artisticgirl. A poem this deep should be shown to the person you are writing this for. She will be proud of the way she is perceived in your eyes. This was a really great piece, very personal, very heartwarming despite the info behind it and very deep. Thanks for dropping it.

 

[jm5471]

thanks for the comments its much appriciated, maybe some time soon ill show it to her, at the moment were really not speaking because of a huge fight but after we get over things ill be sure to show it to her, probably for her birthday