Text Battle Round 1: Jurhum vs L.O.G.O.S.

#2
apologies for the late reply...as ive been saying things have been hectic and ive only had a chance to come on now...ill key something up...

LOGOS-returns-like-Roy-Jones...coming-to-kill-Tito-Ortiz...
Bones-will-be-hurt-while-boy-moans...Punches-make-you-fall to-your-knees...

scores-are-complete the rounds just started and its a T-K-O...
RIP to your verse whichll be buried when mines 3-days-old...

The Tribe of Jurhum held Mecca during days-of-Abraham...
go back to pray...wont make a difference...theres no way-to save-your-clan...

you made-a-stand, faced-the-man, went to judges, your case-was-slammed...
for copying my artwork and defacing a major-brand...

Tried to imitate-your-banned and flipped backwards-like-youre-just-a-Murhuj (mirage)...
this my Rhymes second coming "When Disaster-Strikes",-im Busta-recharged...

this aint a classic-fight-i-trust-this-barrage ended-the-round...
now enter-the-crowd and wait while im prophetically-crowned...


i know thats 6 wack off flow bars but its all i can do right now...if need be i can add to it if im going against any rules here...

some of the punches you might not get...especially the Jurhum reference unless you know your history and the Busta reference unless you know his album list....

peace
 
#3
see that u wanted feedback so here goes

LOGOS-returns-like-Roy-Jones...coming-to-kill-Tito-Ortiz...
Bones-will-be-hurt-while-boy-moans...Punches-make-you-fall to-your-knees...

multiples are questionnable but good flow and decent opener


scores-are-complete the rounds just started and its a T-K-O...
RIP to your verse whichll be buried when mines 3-days-old...

nice hit, original 2nd line, liked these a lot

The Tribe of Jurhum held Mecca during days-of-Abraham...
go back to pray...wont make a difference...theres no way-to save-your-clan...

great flow and multiples, good diss on 2nd but not sure about the relevence of it to Tito, maybe im wrong

you made-a-stand, faced-the-man, went to judges, your case-was-slammed...
for copying my artwork and defacing a major-brand...

tight tight tight, loved these, flow-multiples,direct hit

Tried to imitate-your-banned and flipped backwards-like-youre-just-a-Murhuj (mirage)...
this my Rhymes second coming "When Disaster-Strikes",-im Busta-recharged...

stretching for a hit here, but innovative enough

this aint a classic-fight-i-trust-this-barrage ended-the-round...
now enter-the-crowd and wait while im prophetically-crowned...

hot finish


overall great flow and rhymes but not your best work (punches wise) , im sure it will come as the tourney goes on
peace
 
#4
the line about Jurhum was a switch...historically the tribe of jurhum were in mecca but they were displaced and had to leave...

thanks a lot for the review...

peace
 

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