Tha Birds-N-Bees?

[Kadafi Son]

This is for the lonely fellas and females
Never really understanding how, in love, they can prevail
On my behalf, I've fell in love with my first girl
I intended on giving this angel of mines the whole world
I was raised by my big sisters, so I should know the deal
I thought that I knew how to make this girl feel
But see, I was the quiet type, I think thats why she left me
From the mind of a lone soldier, remembering her: it stressed me
Wishing I knew what a girl really wanted. I'd do anything
Her wish is my desire, but us together was a dream
The birds and the bees; I failed on knowing the definition
All I can do is fantasize about the hugging and kissing
Nobody wants to be alone, especially me
I feel like that true love is going to set me free
Can this happen when I'm shy of words? I'm still sensitive
If I can find you, this is the offering that I would have to give
A lifetime of satisfaction and love. Do what I can
From the mind of a virgin, treating you right is my only plan
I'll respect you like a man should. Put a smile on your pretty face
In this poem I give to you, I hope you feel the taste
Of a passionate brotha looking for a strong sista
Even though I haven't met you, baby girl I still miss ya
Tears are coming down my face because I'm lonely
I have nobody. Not even a true friend or homie
My mission is to hold you til we old with grand kids
I promise I'll never make you feel weak or abandoned
The birds and bees. The knowledge that I hope to abtain
And with this, cross my heart, you will never feel pain.

Thats my word. I'll be waiting for you...

 

[True Thugz]

Haha. WHats up with the peoms up in here? There all good. Been away for a while and come back to this. I enjoyed this. I could so relate to many parts of it if not all of it You got potential to actually find your deepest thoughts and feelings I believe. Your raised by your older sisters. So women you have a total respect for. Can't lose that. Keep this up I'll be sure to check out more of your work down the road to see how much you've progressed.

 

[~live2tell~]

Really enjoyed this, great expression and was feeling the feelings you portrayed. Kinda reminded me of LLCoolJ in his early days 'I Need Love'. Good vocab, good flow - keep it up and I'm sure you will find what you are looking for, once you do hold on tight

 

[Synful*Luv]

Kadafi, I love everything you do, loved this one as well.

I thought the word play was nice, and the whole idea behind the poem was so sweet, how you miss her although you've yet to meet her.

I've said it before and i'll say it again, you are one deep young brother, and I admire that quality in you.

Keep the poems coming for me, I only come down here to see what you've dropped that's new.

 

[The.Menace]

Beeing a negativ person I loved that this isn't a happy love poem. I felt like it's a love poem first but then you turn that around and it becomes sad and yeah, beein me, I like that.

 

[KiRsTyBoO]

On my behalf, I've fell in love with my first girl
I intended on giving this angel of mines the whole world


Even though I haven't met you, baby girl I still miss ya

I love the way u move between tenses, a powerful poem,
such an amazing thought, u dont even know her yet u miss her,
very clever

xXxXx

 

[jm5471]

I'll respect you like a man should. Put a smile on your pretty face
In this poem I give to you, I hope you feel the taste
Of a passionate brotha looking for a strong sista
Even though I haven't met you, baby girl I still miss ya
Tears are coming down my face because I'm lonely
I have nobody. Not even a true friend or homie
My mission is to hold you til we old with grand kids
I promise I'll never make you feel weak or abandoned
The birds and bees. The knowledge that I hope to abtain
And with this, cross my heart, you will never feel pain.


i reallllly liked this piece, this last part in great keep up the good shit

 

[kman_69]

this reminds me of something ive read before...have u posted something like this peice before?

 

[assassin_4001]

WOOOW, this shitt right here is one of this board's finest poems, i could really relate to what u were writing here my man, i liked the rhymes and everything about it, fantastic FANTASTIC POEM!!! really man i mean it, keep it up and i will be waiting more from you. and that's all í've got to say about that.

 

[assassin_4001]

WOOOW, this shitt right here is one of this board's finest poems, i could really relate to what u were writing here my man, i liked the rhymes and everything about it, fantastic FANTASTIC POEM!!! really man i mean it, keep it up and i will be waiting more from you. and that's all í've got to say about that.