Thank U Tupac

[C.J.Mak]

THANK U

As i hear the rain pour outside my window,Siren sound's and car alarms is the only other thing i hear yo,I just lay back and blaize up blunt,Put on my stereo and turn it up.....
I listen to Makaveli the don tracks,I relax and all of a sudden,The only thing i hear now is Tupac rappin real shit..............
That shit that makes him the greatest rapper that ever graced the mic,Listenin to pac makes it easier to deal with my life,No matter how hard a situation that i get into,Listenin to pac makes it easier for me to get through,
Listenin to pac keeps me sane through all the pain,To the greatest ever playa in the rap game,I just wanna say thank u,Coz Tupac im thankful to you,Im sure so many of your fans feel the same way that i do,So from the bottom of my soul i just wanna say thank u..........................

C.J.(The DON)MAK(April 2006)

Let me know wot yall think i origionaly posted this on Musicfantalk in April of this year......

 

[kman_69]

pretty cool drop man

sory im only replying now....i havn't had the net in months...been overseas


anyway...this reads well....it just needs a little more structure in terms of setting it out....e.g:

As i hear the rain pour outside my window
Siren sound's and car alarms is the only other thing i hear yo

instead of a comma, make it a new line...just seems to flow better IMO....but on the other hand, your style of writing is original...something fresh i suppose...

in terms of content, Pac dedication peices have been done to death (no pun intended)....people are kinda tired of them...im guess this is why you havn't had much feed back...


anyway man, keep it up!...look forward to reading more of ya shit!

peace.1

 

[ArtsyGirl]

Not bad definately got better towards the middle til the end. I agree with kman, structure it as he said and it'll be easier for the reader.

 

[Kadafi Son]

Decent. Read it a while back but it was closed

Anyways, I liked it, just think it can go smoother without the commas like everyone else said

That shit that makes him the greatest rapper that ever graced the mic,Listenin to pac makes it easier to deal with my life

truest line

 

[The.Menace]

Oh yeah I like that a lot, not too complex but just pure feelings which is perfectly fine. I know how it is, I love to smoke up some shit while listenin to the 7 days theory as well - really some true shit you wrote down right there, it is real to me at least.