The First Love

[MX Red]

The image of you and me,
The way you made me feel,
The love, The respect,
It's all I've tried to forget,
The void, The emptyness,
The loving thoughts of yesterday
Its all I have left,
My life is a mess,
You made me all I wanted to be,
You showed me everything in life I wanted to see,
You were my dreams,
You are my everything,
Yet, here I sit on my own...
Wishing we never met.

Was feeling sorry for myself one night
peace
MX!

 

[~live2tell~]

This was good, i liked how you ended it... despite how great she made you feel you'd rather never have experienced those feelings. You did a good job in expressing yourself and your rhymes were simple but good. Hope you keep writing.

 

[Ivory$horty]

I liked it. I thought it was short and sweet yet spoke a lot within those few lines. Very beautiful.
Keep it up.

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[Cown]

I know the feeling

It was simple, but still had a messege to it that I know most people can relate to and sometimes the messege is more important then the poem itself. I definatly liked it :thumb:

Keep it up

 

[kman_69]

The image of you and me,
The way you made me feel,
The love, The respect,
It's all I've tried to forget,
The void, The emptyness,
The loving thoughts of yesterday
Its all I have left,
My life is a mess,
You made me all I wanted to be,
You showed me everything in life I wanted to see,
You were my dreams,
You are my everything,
Yet, here I sit on my own...
Wishing we never met.

Was feeling sorry for myself one night
peace
MX!

aw shit, ive been there!....for real.

but you gotta take the good with that bad

watch a movie called "Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind"

 

[shattered dreams]

You made me all I wanted to be,
You showed me everything in life I wanted to see,
You were my dreams,
You are my everything,
Yet, here I sit on my own...
Wishing we never met.


those were my favorite lines..i think everyone has felt that way at one time..i know im feeling it now...nicely written.

 

[Steph]

I really liked it coz like most people here i have felt that before, and because it said a lot in a lil bit of lines. My favorite lines where the same as WhenUrHeroFalls's. that was nice :thumb:

 

[verse]

cool peice,
flow was dope
just up your voc
~GOod THIngs~

 

[Belo]

The image of you and me,
The way you made me feel,
The love, The respect,
It's all I've tried to forget,
The void, The emptyness,
The loving thoughts of yesterday
Its all I have left,
My life is a mess,
You made me all I wanted to be,
You showed me everything in life I wanted to see,
You were my dreams,
You are my everything,
Yet, here I sit on my own...
Wishing we never met.

Was feeling sorry for myself one night
peace
MX!

That was good man.. short but flowed really well and I think everyone can relate to feeling like that at some point
Keep up the good work man
Peace