The One I Gave My Heart To

[Ivory$horty]

I've been ghost for a while, but I'm back to drop a lil something. I was inspired one day whilst listening to Common's 'I Used To Love H.E.R'. This is what I ended up with.
Lemme know what you guys think. Thank ya.

- $horty

The One I Gave My Heart To


The sun sets on my window pane, another day filled with you…
The thoughts in my mind, rewind time; the world has no clue.
What to do?
With someone as unique as you.
So rare and genuine, they whisper…could it really be true?
You and I are entwined; soul mates from the start,
They just cannot understand how you found your way to my heart.
No, it’s hard to explain, the love that has grown,
The rhythm and blues that your soul to me has shown.
You were there from day one, though others couldn’t see,
With each struggle I faced; you were right there helping me.
Through the grief; our belief…overshone all the rest,
Put our love to the test; Yet with each beat in my chest,
I protest….
This phenomenon has swept up a storm,
The day we were introduced; a greater love was born.
I’m reformed…and willing to give thee my life,
Yes, I would give up everything to one day be your wife.
Take the knife….and carve these words out with care,
With each beat of the drum; it symbolizes what we share.
I declare…
Now sing your love song to me.
Vocally….
Perform the words you penned metaphorically.
Physically…
Fine tune my heart but please do not lose it,
Please do not break it and do not refuse it.
Abuse it…
Light the fuse or maybe not even choose it,
Because the one I gave my heart to…
Was you…
Real music.​

 

[Chronic]

I saw you posted from the main forum, I had to check it out since your poetry was very good and this time is no different. The poem is very much free verse but you made it flow well. If this was written to a person I'd say it was touching.

 

[Rahim]

this is a good Love poem...it looks like it's dedicated to somone...someone important to you...i like your word usage like "I protest" and "phenomenon"..good word choices..it definetly brightens up the poem if you know what i mean

 

[ImmortalTech]

this peice is dope! sorry, I really dont have anything else to say. keep writing

~peace

 

[GhettoStar]

Your poetry is tha stuff most guys would love 2 have written bout them...it was an easy and enjoyable 2 read and it made me want 2 write more...




good job F. from yo J.

 

[Ivory$horty]

Thanks to all those who responded. It looks like peoples are getting slack up in here. Thanks to Chronic, Rahim, ImmortalTech & GhettoStar (You weren't and never will be MY J, lol...sorry hun. I got my own)

I think a lot of people have misinterpreted what I was trying to do with this piece. This wasn't written for a guy. It was written for music. The music that I love and have given my heart to. Hip Hop. R&B. etc, etc. I've just used an analogy...written it like I'm talking about a person when in the end, it shows that I'm talking about music

"Because the one I gave my heart to…
Was you…
Real music"

Thanks again to those who responded. As always, it means a lot.

 

[GhettoStar]

Was the "never" really necessary? I don't think so. Anyways it was good piece I look foward 2 reading more from U although I'll watch how I respond 2 avoid future "clarifications". My bad *shakes head*

 

[kman_69]

heyy, long time no see... how u been?

lovin this drop!... this one is right up my alley.... REALLY dope drop... i actually read it while listenin to 'I used to love HER'.. nice flow

Vocally….
Perform the words you penned metaphorically.
Physically…

^^loving the vocab use here...


peace...

 

[KJ1]

i liked the way the poem just rolled on and you kept it personal i assume as i like to do.... thanks for sharing

 

[kimbo_thug]

lucky girl who ever she is wish someone would write that bout me really like it my fav lines :

"You and I are entwined; soul mates from the start,
They just cannot understand how you found your way to my heart."

 

[DaRoYaLbRaT]

Ivory Shorty -Man, wass happenin Girl.. It's been a long ass time, but Its good to come back uppin here and be reading ur work girl... shit aint changed ur style is still dope as..

I loved the way u wrote this - I loved the fact that u wrote something back for music. Music reaches alot of different people on alot of different levels, in every part of the world, affecting each of us in our own way, & this show's that... I feel this and I'm lovin it...


dont wanna pull ur poem to pieces but i have some fav lines..

No, it’s hard to explain, the love that has grown,
The rhythm and blues that your soul to me has shown.
You were there from day one, though others couldn’t see,
With each struggle I faced; you were right there helping me.

Now sing your love song to me.
Vocally….
Perform the words you penned metaphorically.
Physically…

- Feelin this piece girl, keep it up!

pz