Trapped

[Blunted Dreamz]

Trapped, a prisoner forever on insanity’s bed
While slowly the vultures circle over my head
Trapped, each labored breath smells of doom
All I see around me are the walls of my tomb
Trapped, a loser no longer in control of my fate
Chains wrapping my heart forged out of hate
Trapped, feeling if life is spinning out of control
Bloody fingertips slowing losing grip of my soul
Trapped, no longer able to perceive the sun
Looking for answers in the barrel of this gun
Trapped, alone within this mental cell
Slave to my thoughts in this perpetual hell

 

[The.Menace]

I'm just gald to see you back man, come on and post more. I enjoy your work cause it's creative and different - something I hope 2 do myself.

 

[kman_69]

dope drop man!

Trapped, alone within this mental cell
Slave to my thoughts in this perpetual hell

loved the ending!^^...good to see another drop from you as well
man!

peace!

 

[shattered dreams]

i liked this poem a lot, these three lines in particular i was really feeling,

Trapped, feeling if life is spinning out of control
Bloody fingertips slowing losing grip of my soul
Trapped, no longer able to perceive the sun


idk why but they really made me imagine it, for some reason, i cant really put my finger on it, but really good job.

keep it up

 

[Ivory$horty]

I saw your name and I had to peep this straight away. I knew before reading it that it would be dope. And I wasn't wrong. I can't pick a favourite part because the entire piece was just...amazing. Kept me captivated from start to finish.
As usual, a great piece of writing from you. Good to see that you're still around and writing. Make sure you keep it up.

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[jm5471]

i realllllly enjoyed this piece my favorite part was this line

Trapped, alone within this mental cell
Slave to my thoughts in this perpetual hell

keep up the good writing i enjoy reading your work

 

[True Thugz]

Good writing. Remember you from a while back. I think we collaborated with Blunted Shaman on a blunted poem.
Anywayz I liked the whole drop. Good tah see ya back.

peace

 

[Kaos88]

yeh man this is a really good piece. i loved these lines:

Trapped, feeling if life is spinning out of control
Bloody fingertips slowing losing grip of my soul
Trapped, no longer able to perceive the sun
Looking for answers in the barrel of this gun
Trapped, alone within this mental cell
Slave to my thoughts in this perpetual hell

thought this was a real strong part. keep up the good work i look forward to your next piece

peace

 

[~live2tell~]

Trapped, a prisoner forever on insanity’s bed
While slowly the vultures circle over my head
Trapped, each labored breath smells of doom
All I see around me are the walls of my tomb
Trapped, a loser no longer in control of my fate
Chains wrapping my heart forged out of hate
Trapped, feeling if life is spinning out of control
Bloody fingertips slowing losing grip of my soul
Trapped, no longer able to perceive the sun
Looking for answers in the barrel of this gun
Trapped, alone within this mental cell
Slave to my thoughts in this perpetual hell

Great poem, I highlighted the sentences that stood out from among the rest. Hope you post more :thumb:

 

[k69atie]

wow great piece of writing :thumb:

very deep and emotional. keep wrtiting