Untitled deep shit, need some feedback.

[CESARE BORGIA]

Lemme know what yall think aight

Fallin to peices in my mind and its ceaseless
Thugging livin life as a gee since a featus
Came out the woumb two months to soon
Pistols in hand, headfirst twords my doom
Aim to kill, hearts burst rushing my toumb
And even worse, i thirst 4 revenge, deadly sins
Lusting for all seven to bring about my end
Busting, fortyfive in my fist, promised 2 survive
Confide my thoughts in this ryme call it suicide
Thease are the hard times, livin scared show a sighn
Make my mind milatary and change my desighn
Blast if you ever dare me, never stare at me
So sick in my fucking head its almost scarey
Prepair for a life of trial and errorr, in the air
Despair all around, nobody said shit was fair
So i stay sippin my liquer 2 keep me impaired
Ran outa hope so i choke on marajuana smoke
Since i was a kid watchin feinds, taking notes
My dream was to see thease things i never seen
But my reality was mean mugs plottin scheems
Limited means, keepin a weapon hearin screams
I see satan illustrating my death and recreation
The rebirth of a gee from the shit i been faceing
Erasing away the good times, the eradication
Left only with the misery of my own making

 

[Pain Of Depth]

argh why always the thugging on internet? god I hate that , it ruins the songs for me

 

[CESARE BORGIA]

argh why always the thugging on internet? god I hate that , it ruins the songs for me

Are you under the impresion that everybody who uses the internet lives the same way? mabee its time we get over the whole "Only geeks and nerds use the internet" mindset.

 

[True Thugz]

I liked it. Thought it was tight. Flow was good through out.
Nice work :thumb:

 

[CESARE BORGIA]

thanks for the feedback man

 

[Sensai~God]

Are you under the impresion that everybody who uses the internet lives the same way? mabee its time we get over the whole "Only geeks and nerds use the internet" mindset.

Word....

 

[jewfro18]

real deep shit i like...

 

[Sensai~God]

i cant believe u posted this trash....take it out to the dumpster kuz this is str8 trash....fuck u and ur cheesy lyrics...

why would u post this garbage??? I almost threw my monitor in the trash can wen i seen this...

 

[CESARE BORGIA]

i cant believe u posted this trash....take it out to the dumpster kuz this is str8 trash....fuck u and ur cheesy lyrics...

why would u post this garbage??? I almost threw my monitor in the trash can wen i seen this...

Already banned huh? lol

 

[tHuG $TyLe]

Damn that was pretty tight. The opener was nice.

 

[ArtsyGirl]

Yeah was pretty good, a few times it felt like you were repeating urself.. Not sure if it was words or just content. It would have been good if you stayed on one track for a bit to give me a sense of story but still very decent, keep writting.

 

[Ryan2318]

definitely keep writting. I'd have to hear you spit this to tell more about it since some parts seem to lose a little flow, but again i'm reading it, not hearing how you spit it so I just don't know for sure.