Untitled...You think 1 up 4 me...

[Levendi]

this was written after a brief conversation with a member of this board telling me to get my butt in gear and get back to writing which i've neglected for too long, to that person thanks 4 the motivation...

Its a 15 minute job so dont expect much, basically its about both living and writing in a simple way, though i tried to use more complex style to word it in as a sort of irony to the poems original idea of simplicity.


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SIMPLICITY IS THE KEY TO MY EXISTANCE
COMPLEXITY IS MY ONLY RESISTANCE,

COUPLETS AND RHYMES TRANSPOSED TO PAGE
WORDS DRAWN FROM MEMORIES OF AGE,

YOUNGER DAYS TRANSCENDING TIME
A DREAMLIKE SEQUENCE IN MY MIND,

OR THOUGHTS OF DAYS YET STILL TO COME
GROWING OLD WITH EVERY RISING SUN,

FROM OLD AND NEW I DRAW ON BOTH
AND WITH THEM LIES MY PRESENT HOPE,

THAT SIMPLICITY REMAINS THE KEY
AND COMPLEXITY NEVER CONQUERS ME.









sorry for the caps, also replied to about 5 poems before...

 

[Ivory$horty]

Wow....I'm at a loss for words. You turned a short poem into something...magical Something complex without even realising it. I loved the way you did that.

THAT SIMPLICITY REMAINS THE KEY
AND COMPLEXITY NEVER CONQUERS ME.

^^ I didn't want to even pick this apart but these last couple of lines really stood out the most to me. I had to highlight them and let you know how amazing an ending this was.
How long ago did you say it was since you last wrote something?! It doesn't show in this.
Although it's unlike your previous work, it's still an amazing read. Your poems never cease to amaze me. Bravo re Levendi!
Keep that pen to paper ya heard!?

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~

P.S As for a title, how about 'The Key'?

 

[kman_69]

damn CAPS! lol j/k

well written...and good vocab

maybe SIMPLICITY could be a good title?

just a Q:is this simplicity in reference to life itself...or in reference to writting? -or a bit of both...?

*EDIT* ah yeah sorry...lol i never read what people write b4 their poems ...ah well, at least i got what you were saying haha

 

[Levendi]

ivory - thanks girl, you're always too kind. I wrote this almost in one go without stopping for a breathe which was unusual, only funny thing is you say u liked the last two lines, well that is were i stopped and actually had the last line re-worded about 3 times before i settled on that. I was kinda aiming for what you said, to write a poem about simplicity while making it complex, kinda worked, im not fully satisfied, but glad you enjoyed it.

kman - yeh the caps just means i got lazy so i spaced it out a bit to compensate. I kinda like the title u proposed, thanks. Also you are right, (and i thought i touched on this in my first post), that it is a reference to both life and my writing style, complexity that I try to simplify all the time. thanks dude.


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[Blunted Dreamz]

Simply great. It always amazes me how some of the simplest seeming poems can carry such complex and important messages. I agree with Kman, SIMPLICITY is a good sounding title.

 

[~live2tell~]

untitled -

SIMPLICITY IS THE KEY TO MY EXISTANCE
COMPLEXITY IS MY ONLY RESISTANCE,

COUPLETS AND RHYMES TRANSPOSED TO PAGE
WORDS DRAWN FROM MEMORIES OF AGE,

YOUNGER DAYS TRANSCENDING TIME
A DREAMLIKE SEQUENCE IN MY MIND,

OR THOUGHTS OF DAYS YET STILL TO COME
GROWING OLD WITH EVERY RISING SUN,

FROM OLD AND NEW I DRAW ON BOTH
AND WITH THEM LIES MY PRESENT HOPE,

THAT SIMPLICITY REMAINS THE KEY
AND COMPLEXITY NEVER CONQUERS ME.

Great piece of writing. I loved the concept of simplicity and complexity and how it can affect our lives. This was a pleasure to read my fave parts are highlighted. Hope you keep up the good work.